Get Away (Under construction)

[Defiance]

just another ruff cut
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Feed it tell me what you think, improvements praise whatever

-- Wed Feb 02, 2011 2:31 pm --

upping

[Alvin]

Ok, so odd beat but cool regardless. The initial delivery exposes a good vocab, and fret none, no deaf ears here. BUT, its rather hollow... Breath control is rather wreck-less. Concept is cool, but i feel its hindered by your recording techniques. Sound wise its rather acoustic. A lot of reverb, like i can tell its bedroom made. The dubs during the chorus almost sound like your stumbling in some parts, like you forgot your own words. The concept is cool, but again, the way you recorded it shows a lot of areas for improvement. I enjoyed the style. Vocab was nice, the attempted delivery was nice, but breath control, acoustics, and timing on your dubs would make this better. Now outside of talking down, i would like to see you focus on this style a bit more, because it is nice and different. Don't take it the wrong way man, I'm far from perfect as well, but that's just what i heard. I'm not sure if your familiar with the terms, but maybe using a GATE would help a lot, and layering your fillers. As for acoustic fixes, fairly inexpensive ones are mattresses behind the mic, or expensive is acoustic foam.

[Defiance]

thanks for the feed man
yeah i'm recording most of this in my bed room havent insulated the mic area yet so i get the acoustic fact, and also this song is just a ruff copy. i'm still working out the kinks in it. but none the less thanks for the constructive criticism it helps

uppin this piece

[2xS]

Ite, Quality Is Ok, Your Vocals Are High. Theres Also Alot Of Bouncing In Your Vocals, I Can Tell That You Don't Really Have Anything To Catch The Soundwaves, Cuz They're Bouncing Back Into The Mic. Dubs Are Ok Too, Vocab Is On Point. That Chorus Is Really High And Loud. Watch That. 2nd Verse Has Good Delivery. Watch Your Breath Control Too Bro. I'm Hearing Spots Where You Struggled. No Disrespect, But Sticking To Rapping. The Singing Is Killin Me, Jus Be Honest. It Has Points Where It Sounds Good, But Then There's Points That Make Me Cringe. Overall, Decent Track. Jus Needs Alot Of Polishing.

[The Man]

Need better equipment, you got a voice that can work, just need waaaaaay better recording equipment.

[Deciple]

I have this beat laying around somewhere... verse fell off here and there.. the hook was wack.. sry to be blunt but its just not good at all.. the 2nd verse.. around 1:34 been nice to hear some fast rap jump in and finish the verse out.. if that was possible.. the "3rd verse/bridge" wack also.. i dont usually bring down but i would want people to do the same to me.. be wrong to tell you its good when it aint.. keep going tho man, just evaluate and elevate your skills 6/10 here