Got bored so i wrote 16

[Kause mc]

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I've entertained these kids for years like a GTA game/
Markin' walls of the hall of fame with graffiti paint stains/ 
Accually im not that great i sorta rate myself poor/
I dnt care if you hate me cos i hate myself more/
Addicted to scriptures , on somethin no one can touch/
Like knickers on strippers i might never come up/
Witness the sickness no one found a cure for/
Writtens im kickin found in my blood, its pure source/
You hear that shit that makes you bounce? it has to be kause/
Keep your mind in a coma like four panadean forts/
Hold it down like a fat bitch on top of a bar stool/
N treat these try hards like a prostitutes ass tools/
, no need to force the content, cats choose to listen/
Relax through my writtens like they drag me from the system/
, they O.D off my tracks cos i know they feel this/
N i aint talkin websites when i say im the illest/

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[Scrapa]

Ass tools?

I've never heard that had me rolling...

But on the serious side:

Addicted to scriptures , on somethin no one can touch/
Like knickers on strippers i might never come up/

these to lines were def your best.

Rhyming Kause and forts didn't seem quite right, but who am i to judge how you pronounce these.

But reading over againg i don't think it was meant to possibly just a switch in your rhyme pattern...

Not bad for a quick little 16

[Kause mc]

Lol ass tools

Thanks for the feed man im from australia so kause and forts rhyme here but i did expect to get a few comments like that so all good man.
Cheers

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[MesaR]

Yeah this was alright, pretty funny gotta use it in a track though will sound sick with you're delivery.