Look Around

[Kuhlerblynd]

Replied to Orfadox's post and some other shit lol. If you don't get METAPHORS (immacualtely done, might I add), don't bother reading this.
THIS PIECE IS FOR THE WRITER'S ON THE SITE.... Enjoy.

This is me, trying to be, the only thing I believe
Probably never to succeed, but breathe in which will help to relieve
The stress and anger, hint of danger but not wager
On the tips of lifes fingers, thus I must enable....

The demons arise, you seen it inside with a beast and his hide
Sees you confide on the ducks for that beef with some fries
These dudes see their demise, open the gates of Hell
In their place, compelled? A great one would say they should stay as well
Start with a crew, they know you? No, but they dont know who
Put in work beyond Murks and assassinations in a 'phone booth'
Which is text to known spooks, and reappear when it's 'something'
But competition with me and my life means nothing, quit's won't punk me
Lately after the rock, got Jack on my dick like he was after the cock
Nasty won't stop, even Riggz said I put the bastard on lock
YOU know I won that battle, but the casket won't drop
I'm passive with thought, people think I don't think to think ahead
But I think you haven't thought you should think to grow some legs
I know instead, that Josh belongs in the Bible, past tense
And this fuck could suck a blew (haha), that's not French
Begin when I started, dearly departed, in art form I drop it
And ask these fuckers, please put the mark where you marked it
Take it I'm not a punch bringing, swinging for the fences
Hatin on C.I. though, so who's swinging defenseless?!?
Basically, tastefully, I'm reppin the crew, desolate truth infectin ya booth
And if you want to go there, C.I. will end up (again) wreckless like youth...



(Ten minute key)

Squad up!

[NoVeL]

Nasty won't stop, even Riggz said I put the bastard on lock
YOU know I won that battle, but the casket won't drop
I'm passive with thought, people think I don't think to think ahead
But I think you haven't thought you should think to grow some legs

Sick


This was a good read in its entirety. I liked how you mastered smooth transitioning between rhyme schemes and imagery. Great drop fam!

[Kuhlerblynd]

Thanks. I was actually going for that, but trying to keep the content matter of fact, and up to date, with whats happened with me on site lately. Appreciate the feed.

[The Gonz]

This was nice. Dug the rhyme schemes and transitions like Nov pointed out. Had some good content and wordplay here and there. I think the closing bar stood out the most for me. Good flow, I like the direction you were using here, seemed more focused on the multies compared to your other drops from what i remember, which is a good thing IMO.

[leeroi green]

*pops corn*

This is me, trying to be, the only thing I believe
Probably never to succeed, but breathe in which will help to relieve
The stress and anger, hint of danger but not wager

*pours drink*

On the tips of lifes fingers, thus I must enable..
The demons arise, you seen it inside with a beast and his hide
Sees you confide on the ducks for that beef with some fries

k *chews quietly*

These dudes see their demise, open the gates of Hell
In their place, compelled? A great one would say they should stay as well

i would, say that *leans closer*

Start with a crew, they know you? No, but they dont know who
Put in work beyond Murks and assassinations in a 'phone booth'

gettin juicy is that a wilkes-booth

Which is text to known spooks, and reappear when it's 'something'
But competition with me and my life means nothing, quit's won't punk me

*holding breath*

Lately after the rock, got Jack on my dick like he was after the cock
Nasty won't stop, even Riggz said I put the bastard on lock

ooh i knew it was beef

YOU know I won that battle, but the casket won't drop
I'm passive with thought, people think I don't think to think ahead

But I think you haven't thought you should think to grow some legs
I know instead, that Josh belongs in the Bible, past tense

*whispers* who the fuck is josh

And this fuck could suck a blew (haha), that's not French
Begin when I started, dearly departed, in art form I drop it

huh? wait...

And ask these fuckers, please put the mark where you marked it
Take it I'm not a punch bringing, swinging for the fences
Hatin on C.I. though, so who's swinging defenseless?!?

this must be calm before the storm

Basically, tastefully, I'm reppin the crew, desolate truth infectin ya booth
And if you want to go there, C.I. will end up (again) wreckless like youth...

lol sick i can digg it solid drop only a few parts i was lost on but decent transition flow and wrdply i usually wont feed beef verses this a good read

[Omnie]

Okay...easy to read, flow was smooth, and I liked the rhyme schemes. Decent wordplay. I for one, liked how you came at it(beef wise). Good drop. Uno!!!

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[Quix]

Which is text to known spooks, and reappear when it's 'something'
But competition with me and my life means nothing, quit's won't punk me


typo?? quit's??? you meant Quix ... right?? lol



And this fuck could suck a blew (haha), that's not French
Begin when I started, dearly departed, in art form I drop it


OK, I SEE WHAT you were trying tah do, but you no this makes abolutley no sense right?? Suck a blew?? like i said, i get ... but this is Hella forced, because this really doesn't read right.



honestly, i wasn't really feeling this as much as i thought i would. Everything was done well, just not spectacular. all yah bars, were above average (nothing excelant) except for the 2 bars above. I really thought those bars brought down this whole piece.

Not trying to spark more beef or anything dude, just not what i'm used to seeing from you. and after i read (immaculatlly done) you really set your self up for a standard.



overall nice shit dog!

[Scrapa]

This is me, trying to be, the only thing I believe
Probably never to succeed, but breathe in which will help to relieve
The stress and anger, hint of danger but not wager
On the tips of lifes fingers, thus I must enable....

helluva start...
I haven't even read anymore and your first 4 reeled me in good start.

varitaions in scheme
with maintaining a steady flow
and seems as if this one is dropped with the intensity level up
solid all around and in ten minutes
tight drop

[Deception]

Take it I'm not a punch bringing, swinging for the fences
Hatin on C.I. though, so who's swinging defenseless?!?
Basically, tastefully, I'm reppin the crew, desolate truth infectin ya booth

liked this bar n half best to me, not because it hits but reads smooth flow, liked the last line for multi's and how it sounded when i spat it.

overall nice solid drop, not much i can give advice on imo as flow was on point, metas solid, transitions were good nice drop

peace

[QwarterZ]

your flow is getting pretty flawless Murk
I like how you kept the whole thing moving nicely
it really helped keep that oh shit what's next vibe
I'm behind on the beef still but regardless a nice piece
keep doing what you do best dawg!