Lost My Mind

[The Gonz]

Couldn't think of a clever title so I just used the title from the beat lol.

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Pendulum state of mind, thoughts click like a metronome/
Back and forth with the yes and no's, its never set in stone/
The list of questions grow since I over analyze/
Liqour's the best cologne but there's a sober man inside/
The stoner pantomime, my mind deserves a separate stage/
I'm testing fate, check to see how much a message weighs/
My brain's a weapons crate I'm destined to try to open/
But when I pry, something inside denies the motion/
I try to describe what its like when my mind is focused/
Like sculpting beaches with the sands of time on my private ocean/
Or designing hope with nothing more than a group of words/
Producing the truths of earth so the youth can prove it works/
The endless pursuit and search for the meaning of life and death/
Just an enlightened guess, but its simpler than we might suggest/
Don't mean to frighten guests, but I won't conceal the doubt/
Life's the brail version of the Rubix Cube, you just gotta feel it out/

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[Alvin]

holy hell.

I'm testing fate, check to see how much a message weighs/
My brain's a weapons crate I'm destined to try to open/

Like sculpting beaches with the sands of time on my private ocean/

Life's the brail version of the Rubix Cube, you just gotta feel it out/

Some of the best shit Ive read on this site. Cant wait for the audio gonzo lol.

[leeroi green]

yes man dope that is, put it in the air so we can smoke that ish
solid from pendulum to out impressive no doubt

[namri]

i'm not sure if it's good this is the 2nd drop i've read.. not many others will compare.. hahaha. i spit it to myself to "ketto" - bonobo.. shit was tight. subject matter is real as fuck and bars that fit together perfectly. A plus mother fucker

[Kuhlerblynd]

Pendulum state of mind, thoughts click like a metronome/
Back and forth with the yes and no's, its never set in stone/

Good opening. Alot of direction with this...

The list of questions grow since I over analyze/
Liqour's the best cologne but there's a sober man inside/

NICELY done. I like how the flow is kicking off as well. Definitely something that can be spit out loud easily...

The stoner pantomime, my mind deserves a separate stage/
I'm testing fate, check to see how much a message weighs/

Direction hasnt really taken a turn yet, but the mood is set, and the lyrics are solid. Interested to see where it goes now...

My brain's a weapons crate I'm destined to try to open/
But when I pry, something inside denies the motion/

Ah, now I see wheere this is going. The imagery and flow seem to fit so far also. Now Im thinking this should have been a longer piece, but I havent finished yet (obviously).

I try to describe what its like when my mind is focused/
Like sculpting beaches with the sands of time on my private ocean/

Imagery is great. Really, some of the best stuff I've seen you write with imagery so far, and on a topic that is wide open for people to relate with. Good stuff.

Or designing hope with nothing more than a group of words/
Producing the truths of earth so the youth can prove it works/

Man, I think you could have tied in some wordplay somehow with the Earth bit of this. Otherwise, see above.

The endless pursuit and search for the meaning of life and death/
Just an enlightened guess, but its simpler than we might suggest/

Right, I get all of this. It's like asking yourself a purpose. The thing with this piece is, you aren't giving an answer you have came up with, and that's leaving this piece a little open ended, hurting its overall quality IMO. The way it's written though, is fantastic. Definitely one of the most down to earth pieces (haha) Ive read from you.

Don't mean to frighten guests, but I won't conceal the doubt/
Life's the brail version of the Rubix Cube, you just gotta feel it out/

Ah, and by the closer, I ended up being wrong, which makes this even more compelling. Honestly, ending it like this feels to me like you should have had some irony tied more into the beginning. Not that you didnt have any, but just to give that hint. I did like how you ended it, your flow was on point throughout (and you know you have that on lock), plus your bars tied together very very well. I'm glad you pointed this one out to me fam. Nice to see something from you besides in the shoutbox. Over-all - 8.3/10

[Omnie]

^^^ What kind of feed can I give after that...lol

But seriously, another dope piece, flow was sick, made my imagination run wild...

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[Quix]

Pendulum state of mind, thoughts click like a metronome/
Back and forth with the yes and no's, its never set in stone/
The list of questions grow since I over analyze/
Liqour's the best cologne but there's a sober man inside/


loved that part ^

My brain's a weapons crate I'm destined to try to open/
But when I pry, something inside denies the motion/
I try to describe what its like when my mind is focused/
Like sculpting beaches with the sands of time on my private ocean/


this again, was dope main!


those were my two fav parts main...keep it up!

Fire son!

[The Man]

I liked the whole besides the "But when I pry, something inside denies the motion/" -- seemed forced, think you can do better, ad something killer right there. Put some piff in that line, have Drunken Jesus sniffing his computer screen after reading it.

Besides that, good multies, good drop, the first 4 lines were the best.

[FatalX]

damn!!!....thats all I can say

[stayTRUE07]

Something worth recording, if you ask me. Shit was straight fire. Keep doing your thing bro.

[MonuMental]

Yo, man. Ditto. Ish was tight. Stay up, bruh.

[QwarterZ]

Well I wouldn't of expected anything less
still on your ish though...a sick piece
the message was well rounded and kept me entranced
keep writing mu'fucker

[Duke]

"The Pantomime" "man inside" was one of the best multis I've seen on this board.

[Kause mc]

Im on my phone so i cant completely break this down fo u but all in all great read! Lookin forward to new shit man

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[Mic S]

Pendulum state of mind, thoughts click like a metronome/
Back and forth with the yes and no's, its never set in stone/

Good opening. Alot of direction with this...

The list of questions grow since I over analyze/
Liqour's the best cologne but there's a sober man inside/

NICELY done. I like how the flow is kicking off as well. Definitely something that can be spit out loud easily...

The stoner pantomime, my mind deserves a separate stage/
I'm testing fate, check to see how much a message weighs/

Direction hasnt really taken a turn yet, but the mood is set, and the lyrics are solid. Interested to see where it goes now...

My brain's a weapons crate I'm destined to try to open/
But when I pry, something inside denies the motion/

Ah, now I see wheere this is going. The imagery and flow seem to fit so far also. Now Im thinking this should have been a longer piece, but I havent finished yet (obviously).

I try to describe what its like when my mind is focused/
Like sculpting beaches with the sands of time on my private ocean/

Imagery is great. Really, some of the best stuff I've seen you write with imagery so far, and on a topic that is wide open for people to relate with. Good stuff.

Or designing hope with nothing more than a group of words/
Producing the truths of earth so the youth can prove it works/

Man, I think you could have tied in some wordplay somehow with the Earth bit of this. Otherwise, see above.

The endless pursuit and search for the meaning of life and death/
Just an enlightened guess, but its simpler than we might suggest/

Right, I get all of this. It's like asking yourself a purpose. The thing with this piece is, you aren't giving an answer you have came up with, and that's leaving this piece a little open ended, hurting its overall quality IMO. The way it's written though, is fantastic. Definitely one of the most down to earth pieces (haha) Ive read from you.

Don't mean to frighten guests, but I won't conceal the doubt/
Life's the brail version of the Rubix Cube, you just gotta feel it out/

Ah, and by the closer, I ended up being wrong, which makes this even more compelling. Honestly, ending it like this feels to me like you should have had some irony tied more into the beginning. Not that you didnt have any, but just to give that hint. I did like how you ended it, your flow was on point throughout (and you know you have that on lock), plus your bars tied together very very well. I'm glad you pointed this one out to me fam. Nice to see something from you besides in the shoutbox. Over-all - 8.3/10

since he broke it down already - no need to

dope flow/imagery ---- most the lines out of this were dope as hell! others could have used some life - but none-the-less you put this well together