Illness

[lyrical1]

http://soundcloud.com/lyrical1/illness


6 minutes of death instrumental

Still waitin on some shit to fix quality, but I went on ahead and did this one.

Been busy wit shit so its taken a min to post somethin

[2xS]

Haha, I Can Still Here The Original Vocals On The Beat. Idk, There's Some Weird Effect Going On With The Beat, As Well As Your Vocals. What Did You Do? You Have This Dark Delivery Style For Dis Track. Some Real Good Vocabulary Display Here, As Usual. I Feel Like You're Stretching Yourself Out Here. You Shud Take A Breath LOL, Cuz This Is Nonstop. BAD Rushing @ 1:35-1:43. I Can Tell You Doubled The Takes, Cuz The Dubs Lag Behind The Lead, And Then Speed Ahead Of It. Also, @ 2:00 You Have A Issue, Like Everything Just Dropped Out, And Came Bak In. 2nd Verse Started Off Raw. "Humans To Lightweight, Reincarnate The Ice Age" I Liked That. I Hope You Don't Go The Whole 6 Minutes LMAO @ The "What The Fuck" Part. Again With The Issue Of Everything Droppin Out @ 3:41. What Is That?!?! Anyways, Multi'z Are Insane Here. You Need More Energy, It's Starting To Get Monotone Bro. If You Wanna Hold Somebody's Attention For 6 Minutes, Need Ta Change Ya Delivery And Bring That Energy. "Water Than The Beak Of A Pelican" Haha. . .Dawg, You're Going Raw In These Last Two Minutes. Did You Break Out A Dictionary? Lmao. "Tornado Decapitation, Make Ya Chops Spin" Lol. . ."More Risks Than Dracula's Dentist" LMAO Yooo Good Shit. Jus Work On The Main Stuff I Pointed Out. Some Good Lines Here Too Bro. I Enjoyed It

[lyrical1]

The sound effect was a delay, it was an option on the machine. If i take it off it wont sound as strange.

Thx for the suggestions on the rushin, ill work on that. The monotony was really just me tryin to control the volume of my voice and given the length of the song it woulda been a stretch. Im at a natural dis advn. cuz my voice isnt really loud in life, lol. But ill consider doin another run at this for sure.

Thx for the props and the feedback, helpful.

[Defiance]

yeah i wasnt realing feeling this shit, too much clutter it seemed like your vocals were all meshed into the beat too much.. i could barely hear the lyrics. which the ones i heard were great.. not the greatest delivery tho.
definately turn up the volume of the vocals. and maybe take off all the effects and youd probably have a allright track

[lyrical1]

I fixed a good amount of the issues recently, thx for the fdbk

[Deciple]

ALOT going on with the beat, kinda scattered around.. volume going up and down i didnt feel, but the flow was nice.. i just cant really get past all thats going on with the beat.. risky choice of beat man.. it wasnt the best but you did it pretty good... 7/10

[lyrical1]

thx deciple, thing was that the effect was aight when i heard it through the machine, got kinda distorted once it hit the cd, but i took it out and adjusted the vol. on some shit. Is a lil better now but i understand where everyone that left fdbk comin from, trial and error. Ima bein laggin back on a post/recording for a min cuz i got a newer mike, just gotta get my system set up right to use it.

Otherwise, im still craftin lyrics. ima peep all yall newer post whn i get a good chance to listen.