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I'm smacking pathetic whores, immaculate metaphors.

Post by Kau the Lion »

I guess it's about time I weighed in on this, huh?



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My skill can’t be fucked with, the fact of it is: So, ain’t nothing to drop an immaculate dis.
Now, watch if you will as Jack and his kids will get smacked by the Ill the way Africa did.
EM’ll never be famous in music so aiming is useless, plus y’all lame and you’re stupid.
Like, E-MaKulate Metaphorz? I can tell which dude spelled the name of the crew, Quix.
Plus you’re both gay, it’s so obvious when you grab male packages more than post offices.
You’re both talking big but the only ones into Jack ‘n’ Quix are afraid of their folks walking in.
Wanna hear something ironic? A guy that slow naming himself Quix. That’s fucking moronic.
But what takes the cake in this incident: Jack ain’t ever jacked nothing and ain’t ever ripping shit.
Jack da Rippa likes harassing strippers and cuddling on the couch with Quix after dinner.
Bitches about votes that don’t tag him winner. Watch this rat get shitted on. Master Splinter.
I’ll attack your mind in half the time it takes you to blink, but I can get physical, too.
Like I’ll crack your spine for being so fake that you’re practically invisible, dude.
And fuck your pitiful crew, not that I consider it a crew for even a minute, cause it isn’t.
Quix boasts two members, Jack’s a brand new recruit and Riggz says he isn’t even in it!
You better eat your spinach. You’re gonna need your strength to keep me at length.
And Quix, you need to go back to school; don’t deviate; and remediate all the easy grades.
Fuck this wannabe crew leader phony. Fuck your cronies. Fuck your toadies.
And fuck Jack who jumped on the bandwagon so fast you thought he was a fucking Roadie.
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Post by Kuhlerblynd »

LMFAO! Nice nice nice shit here Kau!!! I really should go thru and break it down, but I dont want peeps to get the wrong impression... Let's point out some bars I really enjoyed instead.
My skill can’t be fucked with, the fact of it is: So, ain’t nothing to drop an immaculate dis.
Now, watch if you will as Jack and his kids will get smacked by the Ill the way Africa did.
EM’ll never be famous in music so aiming is useless, plus y’all lame and you’re stupid.
Like, E-MaKulate Metaphorz? I can tell which dude spelled the name of the crew, Quix.
Plus you’re both gay, it’s so obvious when you grab male packages more than post offices.
You’re both talking big but the only ones into Jack ‘n’ Quix are afraid of their folks walking in.
This whole fucking section is on point, disses are solid as fuck, and the flow is consistant. Very well written.
And fuck your pitiful crew, not that I consider it a crew for even a minute, cause it isn’t.
Quix boasts two members, Jack’s a brand new recruit and Riggz says he isn’t even in it!
You better eat your spinach. You’re gonna need your strength to keep me at length.
And Quix, you need to go back to school; don’t deviate; and remediate all the easy grades.
Fuck this wannabe crew leader phony. Fuck your cronies. Fuck your toadies.
And fuck Jack who jumped on the bandwagon so fast you thought he was a fucking Roadie.

Great way to close it out. I thought you Master Splinter line couldve been developed a little better. Also, the line ending in rippin shit seems a little out of place with the flow at the end of your lines. Otherwise, one of the best battle type verses Ive seen you drop, real talk. You have stepped it up. Let's see how they'd like to put it down after this one haha...

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Post by Colossus »

I logged back on just to tell you how funny this was. Really good job.

Male packages punch was dope. Your humor was on point. It was personal. Nice shit.
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Thanks. Glad to see someone outside of this whole "conflict" can appreciate this.
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DO I hear snoring from the obvious source? Hmmm....


This is getting slept on!!!
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Post by Audible Thought »

Lol usually i avoid these battle verses, but this one is pretty damn funny and creative. This is definately on point thruout the whole verse, props to ya.
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Thanks. Appreciate it, AT. And Murk, yeah, this is like the only verse dropped amidst this crew squabble that they haven't commented on.
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And fuck your pitiful crew, not that I consider it a crew for even a minute, cause it isn’t.
Quix boasts two members, Jack’s a brand new recruit and Riggz says he isn’t even in it!
- Gotdamn! Ouch Kau LMFAO @ the entire verse. This was hella creative. Probably the best come back I've read from C.I. Hard hitting personals with some crazy ass punches. I kind of dug the Master Splinter line. Love TMNT!
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