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SHOTS FIRED OPEN COLLAB

Post by Slicka »

OKAY I DID VERSE 1&2 BUT THE CHORUS AND VERSE 3 &4 WAS LEFT OPEN LEMME KNOW IF YOU WANT ON THIS.....THIS IS RUFF JUS A PREVIEW I STILL HAVE TO ADJUST THE LEVELS HOMMIES KNOW ITS LOUD TO LOUD LOL....THE FINAL VERSION WILL HAVE THE LEVELS RIGHT THO!
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Re: SHOTS FIRED OPEN COLLAB

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The beat is nice, your vocals could be mixed better, cuz your a lil loud...Your flow needs to be smoothed out, like stretch your words, don't add more words, just stretch them a lil so it doesn't sound like ur squeezing words in or that your ending lines awkwardly...your second verse was much better in terms of the criticism I just gave...Doesn't seems like a bad track just clean up a few things and it will be str8
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Re: SHOTS FIRED OPEN COLLAB

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I like this shit man i may hop on this with you if nobody has hit you up yet i'm down dope beat and yeah we could make this a banger no doubt
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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