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Riggz
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Hungry Nuff To Eat My Own Words...

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Hardly enough kids here to prick the thistle tween my socks and boots
I keep my rivals playing “catch up” who “muster” hot pursuits
They must’ve lost the goose, forgot the truce and stole the golden egg
Roll on Riggz you’re better off pushing strollers with an emboldened leg
Souls are fed when I write with a type of a scarab’s focus
To leave them barren and hopeless to the point their embarrassed and broken
Roger Maris ferocious..........
Have Bat will hit up carriage and coaches
Dangle carrots and Motrin
for cartoonish nymphs in a oxblood bath
The overconfident notes bogus dominance and talks tough fast
Got them awestruck with a stomach full of rotgut glass
Till they cough up gas, cheaper-buy the dozen and draw truck trash
Trying to walk up fast but still they're merely run of the mill
Left in dungeons to wilt with totem poles plunged thru they gill
The most pungent of ill with revenge in step with ascension
Decorative henchmen who push the cannon for the 2nd amendment
I’m blessed with a vengeance, understand how many supposedly ill
Folks’ll be killed
in the name of battle raps so I can pay some grocery bills
I’m hungry in a figurative and grumbling stomach literal mean
So I came up with a spittable theme to belittle your pitiful team…
ILL Flow - thieves-vt15638.html
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Post by Kau the Lion »

Nice shit. I like how you kept not only the content in general on topic but kept a theme going in the wordplay as well. Multies were pretty tight and for the most part felt natural. Flow was tight as well.
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Thanks for the feed Kau.
ILL Flow - thieves-vt15638.html
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Post by IntrinsicCadence »

I was def diggin' this Riggz. You always gotta real creative way of expression. Ur vocab is elevated and unique. U got a consistent flow, with multis that feel natural. And of course, ur humor always manages to live on in every line, but in a way that adds to the meaning without distracting from it. Good shit here...
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Post by Phasewon »

Decent shit, a lot of the punches didn't land with me, seemed like babble in some parts, although the structure and flow was on point and it got better as it went on,

"I’m blessed with a vengeance, understand how many supposedly ill
Folks’ll be killed in the name of battle raps so I can pay some grocery bills
I’m hungry in a figurative and grumbling stomach literal mean
So I came up with a spittable theme to belittle your pitiful team…"

^^nice shit.
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Post by Glamtrash »

A year later, I still like your writing style. Way to stay on your shit dude lol.

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