off the curb

[davejot]

Never finished up work-still goin on vacation/
no more freakin need for dat bitch finnisha
and its my time to finish-ya/
Im taking down the charisma-
chachacha on ya bitches/
Im keepin dark wishes,
I still keep the lights on/
You better look at me,look at my work
I do it 10 times ur lead single/
and dat bitch loves wearin christian D,s
I do her much like pitchin,
I leave no room for bitchin/
You better love my work,cuz dere's no other option
Stop stealin my lines cuz they'r not for auction/
and you haters standing in a line ready for adoption
Silly ass haters cuz der aint no fuckin option/
Props to you bitches
Waitin for the director to say action
rambo shit,you better get wid it
Things blowing up,like dat cameron chick
And imma blow up everything like,michael bay flick/
watchin every flick,still sittin on my dick/
still grabbin expensive articles,
rhymin the unofficial,still i announce it so official/
born to be on the top
and will be rest in peacin on the top/

[blokB]

dude, i think you could do better than this. i find in my work i have a hard time staying on topic. i guess you kinda did that in a way but the topic you chose was, well, whack for lack of a better word. not tryin to dog you bro but lets take hip hop to a higher level and get off this big screen tv, bitches, hoes, and 40s kick. if thats what you like i mean no disrespect just wasnt feelin this homie. keep doin your thing and keep droppin.

[davejot]

wow thx alightning reply man
actually iv got many rhymes which have a proper subject. The thing is that im new to this site to i wanted to put my out of the blue non sense first to see what types of replies i get and to tell you the truth im getting pretty positive replies
its just been a day on this forum and i already love it
well putting that aside im new to rap so i practice my rhyming skill by writing whatever (this is a example took me 20-30 secs to write it lol). Then write stuff that i live, i see, i feel... Well im not from the ghetto or live a pretty hard life but i still have alot to write about, but it somewhat gets hard as in my mind rap is instilled as money,drugs,hoes etc
dont worry im not inclined towards writing about voilence in my raps...
Anyways thanks for your views appreciate it alot

-- Fri Dec 24, 2010 2:06 am --

[blokB]

mos def bro. like i said no disrespect. just wasnt feelin it u know. id like to peep your other work as well dawg. stay up.