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ANYONE feeds this...

Post by Kuhlerblynd »

And leaves a link to whatever you think needs feed, whether its yours or someone else's, I will feed that piece also...

I wrote this verse against a dude named HERT that no showed me

Ayo...

I'm dope, you confused as fuck about whose the blunt, my psychiatrist says I need to loosen up
You couldn't 'bring the fuckin pain' if you were an ambulance disguised as a HERTz moving truck!!!

You useless fuck... I'll bring the racket like Nadal, you aint got the balls, Tiger Woods
You wanna bring punches to this match learn from his wife, SHE SWINGS LIKE A FIGHTER SHOULD!!!

Lumberjack, you like the wood... Say you spitting it hard, but these blows are splitting ya scars
This a verbal contract out for HERTz, and Im not talking about renting a car!!!

I'm tippin the bar, not leaving change for service, this ya name? It's purpose? Cuz this exchange is worthless
Put it on the surface, you couldn't put a HERT to anyone's pocket if you went through old ladies purses!!!

You a lame, and Murk is.. one that boxes often, leave ya lathargic. you should stop the coughin
Choke on the mic, when his verse's concaved I'ma take the HERT away like an OxyCotin

http://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pubmedhealth/PMH0000589

Illest should abort you, disfigure and distort you, I should report you for tryin to extort stools
CUZ YOU AINT DROPPIN SHIIITTT LIKE THIS, you cant even get masochistic bitches to support you!!!!

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Post by QwarterZ »

I lol'd at most of this, really decent
I haven't peeped any of your battles so I can't compare really
there were some universal punches as my good friend above suggested
but at the same time you still had some lines that were like ewwww

either way this is a good drop from you man
I never seen this side of you, so I may have to peep your battle
that's if no one rushes to it and shuts it down with their votes
either way keep writing man, you got some slick bars!
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Post by Kuhlerblynd »

Thanks for the feed guys.

JJ, Ill be reviewing that thread.

Oh, and the last bar was meant to be relating, since his name is HERT, he cant get masochistic bitches to support him. Those types of females like pain.

Anyhow, I do appreciate the feed. Upz!
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Ok i dont know who this was aimed at but some of the bars had the lol factor to it. Some word play was really dope. Sounds like it would be fun to spit. Nice multiples where there werent metaphores. Good way spread it out the way i see it. Bars were a lil long but they held together nicely with the punch at the end.. I think i had read this before but my memory if vague. Dope drop nevertheless
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You a lame, and Murk is.. one that boxes often, leave ya lathargic. you should stop the coughin
Choke on the mic, when his verse's concaved I'ma take the HERT away like an OxyCotin

best bar ^


mediocore compared to your other verses i've read...but not bad dog
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Thanks for the feed everyone. Ups!
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