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Well, I took today off so I threw this together. Beats super long, so I just used 2 verses. That said I'll welcome anyone who want to collaborate to this strange style lol. Hope you enjoy
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Yezzir, I thank you for the feedback, its hard as shit to get feed on this forum. I agree with you about the spoken word, that's what my style develops from. I actually write most my stuff to non hip hop classical music. I do plan on extending it, just put this much out there today cuz I was off, and kinda say if anyone wanna hop on deal. Thanks allot though.

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This was alright, I wasn't really feeling it too much, the beat just wasn't doing it for me. The flow didn't really have a fluent feeling to it because of the keyboard. Not bad, but not good.
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Well, thanks for the feedback. I have a strange cup of tea, might be a dookie one, but its ok. I understand the beat ruined it for ya, but what'd u think of the lyrics and delivery?

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Yeah im not into this much, The beat is just not doing it for me... Flow was just talking really, second verse got better, but still very "emo poetry" kinda style... delivery for how the beat is is ok, lyrics were good.. over all its decent..
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Good looking out Deciple... "emo poetry" lol<-- never heard of that but i guess im ok with it. First verse was a lot like talking, i agree... kinda went for the spoken word but failed i guess. I appreciate the feed!
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Interesting drop def., seamed emotion driven and very poetic feel to it...I guess like others have said I didn't take this as a hiphop drop as much as a poetic one. I do like the message that was conveyed, the emotion used, and the journey the song took me on. Its was different but appreciated, keep it up man
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Yeah i didn't like the first verse it was just boring, the second verse was good though, the lyrics were pretty good and the tempo was better.

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Thanks Live and Sequence... the song was written as a spoken word style as opposed to rap. The beat didn't have much of a rap beat for the first verse so I ran with it... I appreciate the feed guys. Sequence, the second verse was funner to write and record all around so that prolly says it all... thank you.

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It's just one song so don't worry, keep working on em.
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I like this track a lot. I appreciate your willingness to create and experiment with something unique, and I think it really worked here. I'd agree that the second verse does have a better rhythm and more energy, and a stronger hip-hop feel to it, but I actually liked both verses, thought they complimented each other well. The highlight of this to me was the lyrical content though, for sure. The meaning was deep and interesting, but still expressed clear and vivid. The rhyme structure was also on point throughout, and that definitely enhanced its impact. And while I can understand why it wouldn't necessarily be to everyone's liking and why some people may not feel it so much, to me this is great.
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MIM thanks man, ill keep at it. Hopefully the next one drops with more liking. IC, thanks man, I actually liked it too. I was a little worried it was slept on because its not the "norm". I enjoy these songs more than say... ego songs. I appreciate the feed man, it helps a lot to know someone saw the vision I did. I appreciate everyones feed, good or bad... it all helps.

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I loved this man. Very original and I love that. You kind of reminded me of the guy from Flobots. Only problem I had was a couple times you rushed your flow because you had a couple more syllables than needed but besides that this was amazing.
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Thanks Sentus, as for the Flobots comparison, I'll take that as a compliment lol. I appreciate the feedback man.
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i dig this alot dude. youve read my stuff so you can see why. spoken word is touching and you didnt fail dawg. YOU KILLED what you were trying to say i felt. id love to write a verse for this!
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