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ER215
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This is how I feel...........

Post by ER215 »

Bored at work so imma key in below...


I'm thinking of a past life, maybe it wasn't meant for me/
and if I lived before this time did I carve a place in history?/
Did I leave an imprint on ya mind? or do you even remember me?/
I've been lookin to the sky cuz down here it ain't shit to see/
Damn, How can we live within this moment?/
When tryna make the dollar is the only next component/
and the life you live is hard and you feel like you don't own it/
hardships takin toll on your body and you wish that you can clone it/
Don't wanna work your day job, you ready to say fuck it/
and your night job is place that your ass feels so stuck in/
You wish you hit the lottery but shit not wit the way your lucks been/
But it all feels a lil better when you see your kids tucked in/
Food on the table for dinner time, the light's on/
Not really doing nothing special just gettin your life on/
Single parent, just you and the kids, the wife's gone/
Hard for you to find right so it's seeming that u like wrong/
Sombody turned the mic on, but you don't really speak much/
Your peers sayin that you greedy but really you don't seek much/
A lot of friends call in favors but none of them just keep touch/
So now you just let the phone ring cuz you rarely even seek such/

... this is how i feel......
All my girls be model hot/ Yea your girl she probably not....
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Post by TheNobleOne »

this shit was real son, i was diggin it. nice piece man.
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Post by TJ Blaque Aka TL »

I can dig it . Concept was well written. I like the flow , and where you were going with it . Stay up.
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Post by Phasewon »

Nice shit for a key, multies were basic at best, yet still effective, flow was on point, feelin' the poetic vibe to it, overall some good shit for what it was, a key, not bad.
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Post by FlipSide »

man this was deep bro..seems like hardships bring out the most in people... def had the emotion to kill the flow with ... basic rhyme scheme but the delivery was there.... these drops keep things in perspective.. stay up 1
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