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My expectations high are for another love
but people say I need to sweep it under rugs
forget the past, and become a thug
or atleast a player thats what a brother does
not knowing he could be so cliche
or even stand lookin in that mirror each day
like "what the fuck" my style's cleaner
and maybe sometimes I got a wild demeanor
but that don't mean I want a child either
dude tryna cash in his tax returns, file visa's
up..so he could have a lil' credit on him
instead of walkin' round with this debit on him
I know to you it's just a pathetic want annnd...
might be a dream, but atleast respect all it
ever gave me, never once have I acted shady
called you baby, or tugged your arm, atleast lately
see I'm growin' up, with a fresh pair of kicks
no scuffs, and honestly I don't know what marriage is
it could be when you sick of tryin' you belt down
stop servin' lust, and start askin' to get helped out
or it could be when you think you found the one
the one you to twist your lips around his tongue
I doubt it hun, not saying that I ain't one to do that
but I been through that, along with so many loose acts
who just want to be served cuz they think the need it
the walk ain't always smooth, but atleast it's scenic
I ain't askin' for much, maybe just a lil' time
a few drinks, possibly corona's mixed with a lil' lime
shit, I ain't say I was perfect and atleast I ain't lyin'
I could spit game all day, equators with invisible lines
but I ain't I'm tryna open up a bit so what you expect
all I'm sayin' is all of these moves is based on whats next
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Post by Kuhlerblynd »

Man this was fucking dope. I liked the flow and how you were speaking matter of factly, instead of hyping it. Just gave it a more at home feel and a poetic touch. Definintely feeling it.
I know to you it's just a pathetic want annnd...
might be a dream, but atleast respect all it
ever gave me, never once have I acted shady
called you baby, or tugged your arm, atleast lately
see I'm growin' up, with a fresh pair of kicks
no scuffs, and honestly I don't know what marriage is
it could be when you sick of tryin' you belt down
stop servin' lust, and start askin' to get helped out
or it could be when you think you found the one
the one you to twist your lips around his tongue

Felt this 100.
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Thanx home brah!
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Post by Riggz »

QZ, you amaze me with your gift of just continous writing. I mean "writers-block" is just not in your vocab is it? :clap:

"the walk ain't always smooth, but atleast it's scenic"

This flowed well to Talen instrumental. Start to finish. Nice write my man.
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Post by Audible Thought »

this is a dope drop, i can relate to this a lot. i love it when an emcee just spits whatever questions and thoughts he has on his mind at the time.

"the walk ain't always smooth, but atleast it's scenic"- favorite line
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Post by Omnie »

I read the verse(pretty fast) first without the beat and thought it was pretty dope, but when I put it on it just switched it up and made it better. It flowed nicely and I liked how u just put down whatever was on ur mind, I don't mean like off the top, I mean like thoughts that could've been brewing...keep at it sir...

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