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Written to Wiz Khalifa "Superstar"

I mess around and burned em
They try to get on, I spurned em
You want more praises from me, then you better earn em
Cuz the minute you start slacking, you invite those half-wit fools that aren't afraid of action
But that my opinion, take it how the hell you want
And if you're contemplating sypathy don't
This cruel world didn't show us nothing, not mercy or the time to rest
But I digress
As long as this beat remind of walks on the beach
Sipping on caronas, never getting any sleep
I got that royal flush for you, read em and weep
And a lot of people talk shit, but soon enough that will cease
I release all pent up energy in this
And I can go romantic, shakesperian sonnet
Hey girl I'll show the world on my coment
Just rember that karma is a bitch, and so are negative comments
And my flow is the truth that if somethings wrong it right it
And if youre far-sighted, I can give you free perscription
To my words, it performs miracles just give this listen
I think I'm a supernova,
A bright light until I died and came back warming up these cold shoulders
It's been a long time coming man
I think now is the prefct time to start ushering me in
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You sound a lot like Drake... this needs to be moved to Creation Chamber
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I keep hearing I sound like Drake. Ugh, not what I'm going for. The worst part is to me I sound nothing like him.

I know it should go there, but I'm not a rapper. Just a writer. I only record so it'll give more clarity on how the words I wrote should be placed, since I tend to change my flow whenever it fits the cadence.
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I lol'd at the Drake comparison again...

*ahem*

either way this was pretty cool, the writing seems rushed
but on the track it comes through a bit more clearly which is cool
but at the same time it's like whaaaat? I don't like reading and listening
unless I have to really pay attention, if you mess up on your own lyrics
it takes away from the piece, well, atleast to me it takes away from the piece
either way nice lil' drop man, the flow was on point, lyrics were cool
you might aswell just accept the comparison and switch it up though
think up some other shit and you won't get compared...peace!
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