Get off my dick

[Omega Bill]

Blade will slash ya upperclass ass I managed to be damned with spits
Cut ya life to bits, opened wounds damaged, bleedin through ya bandages
He act like he got a tool and he run with guys, mother fucker Im done with lies
Rip out ya asophagus, so much gauze look like ya in a sarchophagus mummified
Im about to flip out, this shit clown need to sit down, for the 4 start to spit rounds
Lips pout, have your vest 'Wardrope Malfunction' like a titty suddenly slipped out
Fuck this kid on about? Im on the route without a doubt to his house, he down n out
Now he poutin how he didnt want trouble with his lungs n heart tryna pound n shout
Shut ya mouth, sew ya lips so u cant vent with ya speak, left dents in his chest piece
Kick ya pride Best me, unlikely, because u epitomize why its illegal to live incestually
Get back, youll never find a dime, Im grindin time, ya raps are shit every time u rhyme a line
Bitch read the signs, you should forfeit cuz when I spit its like a mix of arsenic and cyanide
He tryna climb to the top but cant get past the grime, Im combattin lines clappin nines
Slappin minds, this asinine rapper knows hes always last in line cuz hes past his prime
U tryna find time to write, starvin for wins, leave scars in your jaw, for u Im carvin a loss
U barfin up the salad you toss, leave his dome an 'Open Pit' leaking out barbecue sauce
Bars r soft, get out the booth kid, Im ruthless, all of Illest, they know u miss when u shootin
The proofs in ya toothless grin, what I do when I decide to 'Rip-It' lke Faygo distributions

[Kuhlerblynd]

Breakdown...

Blade will slash ya upperclass ass I managed to be damned with spits
Cut ya life to bits, opened wounds damaged, bleedin through ya bandages

This opener is cool with the imagery, definitely, but isnt really delivering on the punch side of things. As a topical, tho, it sets the tone of where this is going...

He act like he got a tool and he run with guys, mother fucker Im done with lies
Rip out ya asophagus, so much gauze look like ya in a sarchophagus mummified

Mutli's are tight, Im liking how you are working your rhyme scheme. Its pretty fuckin tight, honestly. The imagery is still there, and this hits more on the punch side of things. Nice bar, no doubt.

Im about to flip out, this shit clown need to sit down, for the 4 start to spit rounds
Lips pout, have your vest 'Wardrope Malfunction' like a titty suddenly slipped out

This is exactly what Im looking for... The set up could have some wordplay incorporated perhaps to make this bar a little better, but Im picking... The punch delivers nicely and the flow hasnt fell off at all.

Fuck this kid on about? Im on the route without a doubt to his house, he down n out
Now he poutin how he didnt want trouble with his lungs n heart tryna pound n shout

The pout part was kinda said already, and IMO this was the bar that couldve been re-written. Doesnt really deliver on more than a nice rhyme scheme.

Shut ya mouth, sew ya lips so u cant vent with ya speak, left dents in his chest piece
Kick ya pride Best me, unlikely, because u epitomize why its illegal to live incestually

This is fucking tight. Verse picks back up hard with some imagery and a tight punch. I like how you worded the rhyme scheme here too.

Get back, youll never find a dime, Im grindin time, ya raps are shit every time u rhyme a line
Bitch read the signs, you should forfeit cuz when I spit its like a mix of arsenic and cyanide

This was kinda self-hype, but was effective to a degree. The degree being, I know you can come up with something a little more witty on the "I spit fire" tip.

He tryna climb to the top but cant get past the grime, Im combattin lines clappin nines
Slappin minds, this asinine rapper knows hes always last in line cuz hes past his prime

This is a fucking dope rhyme scheme. I reallyl ike how it came together. Punch lacked a little, maybe thrown some wordplay in...

U tryna find time to write, starvin for wins, leave scars in your jaw, for u Im carvin a loss
U barfin up the salad you toss, leave his dome an 'Open Pit' leaking out barbecue sauce

This is what I look for in every part. It has all the elements. Wordplay- check. Multi and nice rhym scheme- check. Punchline- check. Fuckin sick shit here. And the imagery to 'top it off'. Nice.

Bars r soft, get out the booth kid, Im ruthless, all of Illest, they know u miss when u shootin
The proofs in ya toothless grin, what I do when I decide to 'Rip-It' lke Faygo distributions

Nice closer here. A little self hype type, but still a nice closer.

What I would tell you is that this has more of a "diss track" feel to it, instead of an actual battle verse... The reason I say that is because Ive seen you come more consistant on your punches coming hard with each line. However, as a diss track type of piece, this was on the money because the flow and imagery and vocalization of everything is cool as shit. Props on this. One.

[DoggyStylez]

Nice drop buddy. Just wasn't sure on tha last bit of the ryme, from the barfin up the salad he tossed bit, Ike Faygo distributions must be an american thing so don't fully get it bro.....but i enjoyed this piece as much as others so hopes ya keep postin loco....

[TheNobleOne]

this was a pretty decent drop man. flow was pretty nice. had some lines in there. always love the kill ya and eat ya guts type shit. i do think some of the rhymes were a bit basic in certain areas but for the most part it was pretty solid man.

[Omega Bill]

Appreciate the feedback, guys.

[QwarterZ]

This was pretty slick man, your flow stayed on point for the most part
I don't know if you were going at anyone or not, but this was smoooooth
the punches weren't what I expected, then again it's like what's his face said
it's more like a diss track, but it's still dope though, nice drop my dude

He act like he got a tool and he run with guys, mother fucker Im done with lies
Rip out ya asophagus, so much gauze look like ya in a sarchophagus mummified
Im about to flip out, this shit clown need to sit down, for the 4 start to spit rounds
Lips pout, have your vest 'Wardrope Malfunction' like a titty suddenly slipped out

^^^^^^I lol'd

nice drop! keep it up!

[Omega Bill]

Appreciate the feedback on this, fellas.

Leave me a link to something you need feed on.

[Kuhlerblynd]

Feed my Chapter Two piece if you get a chance, that would be appreciated.

[GeneralTrife]

I mean, please excuse me for being so serious,
but do youhave an audio to this...
I'd like to hear you spit that to a beat...
for a text, not bad at all