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Straight Through - Ambition

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Straight Through - Ambition

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New Track.

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Damm I read That Line That TOYH Pointed Out And Had To Check It Out Dope Man You Did A Great Job On This Straight Spittin Shit, A Smooth Flow And Consistent imo, overall i enjoyed the track had a good old school vibe, keep this shit comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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This was a sick song like they all said. Only problem I had is you didn't really have the slow flow mastered. I couple times it sounded ehh, also your delivery wasn't as clear as it could be. Sometimes you slipped up with that. Other then that though great track
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Re: Straight Through - Ambition

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Getting my guitar wrong, music with no strings attached.
I liked that a lot.

Not bad over all. Flow was really squeezed in some places and stretched in others. But your delivery helped to smooth that out.
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