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The World (Key)

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http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ql8mZ-NWmdc







Everything became computerized
and I stood before the shooters eyes
aiming at the screen to reduce the nights
who am I? the last of the newest types
all I do is write, combined with suicide
I kill myself just tryna ink a deal homey
did it for the kicks, just think appeal solely
as the world consoles me, with links to save me
like Zelda, kidnapped, so I think this is shady
the way the people ain't did shit for Haiti
but that's me, all I can conceal is my anger
and I throw up a sign, a middle finger to danger
as the ink links to fill up the page, easily real
it's like I just put it there to happen, like the BP spill
consider me your favorite, rhyming that's tasteless
but like George in the sight of trouble, I abandon nations
attack the nearest dispute, and confuse the troops
now whose to boot? get it? nevermind that now
back to the future at hand, how could you lose a grant
as soon as you consume a plant that presumes to dance
in the mind of melancholy thoughts, your probably lost
but banning a drug? it could prolly help increase the economy
thoughts, rattle in my brain, I'm thinking like a mad man
dealt a bad hand since the world sent me into this damn...damn....


damn I lost it...
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as the ink links to fill up the page, easily real
it's like I just put it there to happen, like the BP spill
Missed ...cuz it was a key...but u had it there dude..
but like George in the sight of trouble, I abandon nations
I Like This One Liner Here reminds Me of something Plex Was Speaking About.....But I Was High....

Nice Flow....For A Key... Id Rather Read Ur Drops Tho..Cuz It Seems (For What Im Used to seeing from u) That U Half Assed This Key.... But Nevertheless It Was Tight... lol.. U Know what i mean
BANG BANG!!!! I Shot U Down
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Re: The World (Key)

Post by MC Believe »

Liked it it had some good metaphors the Link Zelda and George abandoning the world (i also got a diffrent BP Line too)

The Overall message/tone escaped me but it is a Keystyle

The Flow was nice mostly consistent but some parts reminded me some of eminems flow (or is it just me?)
Couldve used a better ending but i just read damn u lost it

Overall Nice Read
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