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I roll with thugs that roll with punks
That roll them blunts
And ask my girls cause they know how I front
And ask my haters, it must be cold in the trunk
Teeth gold when I stunt

So you wanna fly in planes
Do lines of cocaine
Bitch, I aint got time for games
You thought i was the queen with these diamond chains
Face red, thats the sign of pain

You live for drama
I live for cheques with the big ass comma
And fuck bitches with the rich ass mama

I'm a gangster, I deal more bricks then a condo
A gangster that came from a hood like gondor
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"I roll with thugs that roll with punks That roll them blunts And ask my girls cause they know how I front And ask my haters, it must be cold in the trunk Teeth gold when I stunt"

There is alotta filler in these bars. You can out most of these words and it would actually sound purdy cool. The rest of it was aight. Nothing crazy or special but it had a nice flow. It was a lot cleaner that the part I put in quotes... anyways keep em comin and keep elevating son.

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Yea bro i know what yea mean i did do alot of filler, will do betta. Appreciate the feedback.
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I roll with thugs that roll with punks
That roll them blunts
And ask my girls cause they know how I front
And ask my haters, it must be cold in the trunk
Teeth gold when I stunt


Don't think you really need that.


So you wanna fly in planes
Do lines of cocaine
Bitch, I aint got time for games
You thought i was the queen with these diamond chains
Face red, thats the sign of pain


Liked This.


You live for drama
I live for cheques with the big ass comma
And fuck bitches with the rich ass mama


LOL. i feel you


I'm a gangster, I deal more bricks then a condo
A gangster that came from a hood like gondor

Didn't Rhyme.


You got a lot of potential to go where ever u want With ya writing.
just got to practice and Keep at it.

This was decent. Keep at it
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