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Duke
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Heroin

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Maybe I got bored watching time dragging and that’s why I’m chasing the dragon/
Popping syringes in the lab and searching my veins until I stab one/
The dope heals my soul like a Rabbi, my magic carpet floating like Alladin/
Problems disappear like I never had ‘em, consumes the time I used to spend rappin’/

It’s endless the lengths that I go to keep myself in syringes that drown my senses/
Hopping picket fences and robbing houses with a vengeance, stuff I shouldn’t mention/
List of crimes committed extensive, snatch a purse off the defenseless/
Unwashed and demented, this life don’t come highly recommended/

Dope fiends in my apartment, lethargic shooting shit like it’s a target/
My habit is the largest and my nights as black as Marcus Garvey/
On the narcotic tip cause the habit is too hard to kick/
Getting blue lips off this black market shit, reaping what I harvested/

But good things never last and my door gets crashed down by the task wearing black masks/
I’m drastically shackled and dramatically packed in the back of a paddy-wagon/
But those cops saved my ass cause the next step was that toe-tagging action/
Mind blasting how I missed catching AIDS when it’s spreading like a fashion/

Thinking I’m heading for the prison when the judge hands me a suspended sentence/
Trying to get religion but it’s hard when I spent my life ripping off some pensions/

Headed home trying to keep myself off the dope with daily shots of methadone/
A junkie’s life a tragic poem crossed with a weeping widow’s suicide note/

Want to stay clean but my doom is calling through the gloom of a little balloon and a metal spoon/
The pain of my addiction as big as this room and starts to bloom like a magic mushroom/

My mind spinning like some bicycle spokes knowing I’m a die from an overdose/
Why fight the life that I chose with this knife to my own throat
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Re: Heroin

Post by QwarterZ »

When I read your flow I can tell your sounding out each word
which is a healthy practice, as far as text goes, people might NOT catch on to it
if you enunciate it correctly it comes off dope which is cool
the content is cool, but it feels like there's always a piece like this
which is ok, but sometimes overdone, I see what you were doing tho'
the flow was on point at times, then it started slippin' a bit
but it's good nonetheless, the whole metaphorical feeling is dope (lulz)
keep writing
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