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Lawgix's short little flow
Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 7:14 am
by Lawgix
sorry guys my uncle passed away and i started on this the other night but was unable to finish it. so heres what i got anyways. hope u enjoy
Leave u miffed, ripped, pissed and shitted on like Manure
I maneuver like I was a skilled expert a majestic connoisseur
My flows'll leave u dismantled, my nick names “snake I'sâ€
Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 9:37 am
by Viral
not bad its jst the format of it is really fucked up...lol but other than that its pretty straight ill give it a 7.9/10
keep it up ill expect better next time
Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 10:40 am
by Lawgix
thanx man appreciate it. i was gonna do more on it but my uncle died but thanx man appreciate it. i'll work on structure and shit. what else u think it needs? hit me back
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Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 12:03 pm
by Viral
honestly i think its all good...there r some parts where u could add more rhymes n such...like a different rhyme scheme...if u go thru my old writtens..or listen to my audios..or go thru complexity's or ekoms or even precise's writtens...ull see wat i mean..if u want i can help u out man...i got no problem wit dat...jst hit me up on AIM or somethin
D1s3AsEdV1ruS
ill b on around like 11 or 12 if ur up at dat time...
Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 1:35 pm
by drunken jesus
structure was kinda poor... rhyming was simple at points but it showed potential, just work on getting a lil more complex with rhyming and wording
Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 2:22 pm
by Invincible
Good work...
Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 2:54 pm
by Lawgix
thanx for all the feedback i'll get to workin on my shit, i'll take u up on that viral, my msn addy is
[email protected] if u wanna add me on there. but thanx for the feedback.
l8ter