Lawgix's short little flow

Lawgix · Post by **Lawgix** » Tue Sep 26, 2006 7:14 am

sorry guys my uncle passed away and i started on this the other night but was unable to finish it. so heres what i got anyways. hope u enjoy

Leave u miffed, ripped, pissed and shitted on like Manure
I maneuver like I was a skilled expert a majestic connoisseur
My flows'll leave u dismantled, my nick names â€œsnake I'sâ€

Viral · Post by **Viral** » Tue Sep 26, 2006 9:37 am

not bad its jst the format of it is really fucked up...lol but other than that its pretty straight ill give it a 7.9/10

keep it up ill expect better next time

Lawgix · Post by **Lawgix** » Tue Sep 26, 2006 10:40 am

thanx man appreciate it. i was gonna do more on it but my uncle died but thanx man appreciate it. i'll work on structure and shit. what else u think it needs? hit me back

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Viral · Post by **Viral** » Tue Sep 26, 2006 12:03 pm

honestly i think its all good...there r some parts where u could add more rhymes n such...like a different rhyme scheme...if u go thru my old writtens..or listen to my audios..or go thru complexity's or ekoms or even precise's writtens...ull see wat i mean..if u want i can help u out man...i got no problem wit dat...jst hit me up on AIM or somethin

D1s3AsEdV1ruS

ill b on around like 11 or 12 if ur up at dat time...

drunken jesus · Post by **drunken jesus** » Tue Sep 26, 2006 1:35 pm

structure was kinda poor... rhyming was simple at points but it showed potential, just work on getting a lil more complex with rhyming and wording

Invincible · Post by **Invincible** » Tue Sep 26, 2006 2:22 pm

Good work...

Lawgix · Post by **Lawgix** » Tue Sep 26, 2006 2:54 pm

thanx for all the feedback i'll get to workin on my shit, i'll take u up on that viral, my msn addy is [email protected] if u wanna add me on there. but thanx for the feedback.

l8ter

Lawgix's short little flow

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