Metal Coffins

[QwarterZ]

I was the last dude on this track.....it's my boy Mic B's track
this is prolly the best one I've done...I'll add another later

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[Deciple]

There is an error homie, cant listen to it.

[QwarterZ]

DAMMIT........o well I got a written coming up anyway lulz

[Lawgix]

i fixed it... all u gotta do is add the song ID's digits thats all it takes not the whole URL...

-- Fri Jun 18, 2010 11:22 pm --

k i will be honest with you instead of kissing your ass lol... lil chief SUCKS plain and simple... the hook was badly recited honestly... the second dude was better than lil chief but not good either... third guy kinda sucked too... now on to you... not alot of flow no emotion at all... sometimes its better to shorten ur verse so it fits to the beat... and its ALWAYS good to show emotion on a song... i heard ALOT of potential in this that wasn't there... thats the key to a track is emotion cuz if the listener gets bored they will flip the track... thats what you DON'T want... grittiness is what u need to work on honestly... you and the rest of the cats that made this track... iuno how long ago this was created but it wasn't BAD but i didn't shit my pants either... lol... i can tell this wasn't mixed either n thats okay not alot of people know how to mix n master... fuck i don't have the hang of it just yet... but this was a good way to practice on what you needed to work on... liked the effort and the concept was dope too... unfortunately the song just didn't work out for me... but for the concept and the effort and since this is (probably) your first track u've dropped on illest i'll give it a 7/10 good shit man i wanna hear more my dude...

[Deciple]

The beat is an dark mysterious beat, the 1st dude i wasnt really feeling, he had lil emotion and he fell off the last couple bars, i like the flow of the 2nd dude, he did his verse good, 3rd verse it seems like the bars are longer or shorter then they need to in the verse couple bars or just crammed together then middle of the verse they get on a flow and ride on that right the rest of the verse, your verse has the most flow and delivery to it, good lyrics, fell off very minimal, im not to fond of the hook, and the mixing could be upgraded, kinda low all the vocals to the beat, and when the hook comes its way louder so when the verses come you gotta adjust your volume at home, or at lease i did, over all its a good track, keep it up man.

HAHA, didnt know i posted alot of what lawgix said, if i had read his i would have just put, "Yeah, what he said".. But take this as now you know what to do to make a better track

[FlipSide]

i like the beat.... 1st dude is not bad.. he ok.... i can tell he dont record much.... he missing ...what can i say confindence on the mic... the second dude sound a lil better... same issue tho.. it happens when u not used to ur voice on the mic..third guy sounds like a triplet of the first two but the was off beat hard...thats key... but u tried to ride the beat...and u know how to length out ur bars... sooooo next time practice ur verse a lil more and u should be descent man... and i agree to lawgix on the putting heart into it but i also got the same problem... other than that cant expect a lot off quality since u aint put it up here for that...its evident...keep flowing and droppin dude

[QwarterZ]

0_0 your very wise TOYH