tragedy (freestyle)

[deafshady]

Got the clips to help you levitate, sky high magic,
My lyrics always devastate, bye bye tragic,
Got the pills to help me meditate, a crime cry habit,
Don't mimic cause I won't hesitate to highlight parrots, (parrots mimic)

Spittin high class static that will melt you like acid,
Tried to obliterate me but flow and talent you lacked it,
Im on a mission to reach positions to help me make a living,
Put my life together like nucleur fission with great precision,

I disobey laws of physics when I grabbed gravity and lift it,
With my lyrics I create a image showing my inside soul conflicted,
Cash at hand large dosage at great economic proportions,
Cut my enemies into portions then put them up for extortion,

As I was cleansing my mike the devil approached me,
Offering me opportunites of wisdom and skill that flows neat,
I was still well within my ignorant mind set,
Didn't think twice took the offer thinking I've been high blessed,

Now constant shadows surrounds me with life and death choices,
No longer arrogant at what I did I'll use the wisdom to exploit them,
With unimaginable forces drawing near to my desires,
Can't say I'm a saint, a priest or a friar,

Can't say that I am perfect but I know enough to undo my wrongs,
Life isn't worthless but I've been cursed to spit these rhymez in this song,
My stories tell of horrible imaginings, of a crazed infested rabid beast,
Don't wanna be another helpless memory in a tragedy....

[FlipSide]

this is a form of elevation i see in you.... im starting to either be fooled or be a fan...certain questions arise that i will bite my toungue on tho

u started with kind of an open key then narrowed the last 3 sections into a lil story setting which in me aquired a lil interest. it also had some multis schemes in there and nice flow to go with it.

"Got the pills to help me meditate, a crime cry habit,
Don't mimic cause I won't hesitate to highlight parrots,"

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[deafshady]

ummm that "Got the pills to help me meditate, a crime cry habit,
Don't mimic cause I won't hesitate to highlight parrots," i cant describe what i m trying to say...

[P.Picasso]

No Offense But It Seemed Like You Just Tried To Rhyme The First Bars Together...I Noticed A Switch The Second Set Of Bars...

As I was cleansing my mike the devil approached me,
Offering me opportunites of wisdom and skill that flows neat,
I was still well within my ignorant mind set,
Didn't think twice took the offer thinking I've been high blessed,

Could Of Worded This Way Better...Not Trying To Be Mean Because I've Yet To Lay Down A Piece Of My Work To Be Critiqued Haha But This Verse Seemed Rush As If You Key'd It But Overall Not A Bad Read...(If It Was A Key) Ight Mayne If You'd Like A EVEN MORE Detailed Description Like Bar For Bar...PM