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Haz
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Threw the Roof

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Demented Mentor Reinvented As a Vent Whore
Use To Hold Shit in when It Meant More
Bent For The Reason Of Breathing, Seeming
Like Theres No Treason With Demons, Fiendin
For the Sky's To start Beaming a Meaning,
Skeaming? Never, Rather Not The Chatters Stop'd
The Other Me's in a Coma Let it's Ladder Rot
Opinionated conversations is Like The Batter Spot
i Never saw the World fall Apart when the Matter Drop'd
Their Here ta Push Like i Got Gel in Hand,Selling Spam
Comparing M-C's Ta Me is Like Snitching Wtf U Telling Man??
Shelling Stan's Like Hot Dogs Sold Thru Gas Stations
I'm Passed Waiting i'll Throw ya Orda In ya Face Till Glass Breaking
Ask Satan The Heats Under Ground Fuck What The Mass Stating
When it Comes To Gifted Every Christmas i Intercept The Twelve
Still RETARDS Talk About My Shit Like It'll Effect Themselves
Getting At Um Like Dudes Jacking Off Hints Of Apple Sauce
Rapping Soft,Their Mouths Give Um Credit Not Knowing what Yapping Cost's,
Same Dudes Is Who Got Debt Like a Topless Driver ..Threw The Roof
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QwarterZ
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Re: Threw the Roof

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Bent For The Reason Of Breathing, Seeming
Like Theres No Treason With Demons, Fiendin
For the Sky's To start Beaming a Meaning,
Skeaming? Never, Rather Not The Chatters Stop'd
The Other Me's in a Coma Let it's Ladder Rot
^^^^^^^^that was nice

I felt the imagery in this, very skillfully done
and very well written
your styles dope when you interweave your words like that
keep writing bro!
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Re: Threw the Roof

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damm i liked the flow on this built up for me, cus well we all got different ways of reading it, had nice flow to it and some nice metas

I'm Passed Waiting i'll Throw ya Orda In ya Face Till Glass Breaking
Ask Satan The Heats Under Ground Fuck What The Mass Stating
When it Comes To Gifted Every Christmas i Intercept The Twelve
Still RETARDS Talk About My Shit Like It'll Effect Themselves

this was fire imo nice drop haz keep this shit comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Re: Threw the Roof

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whole shit was hott until the ast line...why the fuck did u do that n throw off the rhyme scheme?
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Re: Threw the Roof

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Yea bro, I was feelin' this whole thing until the last line. I mean I get the picture/punch you were trying to create with it, but it just needs to be woven in better. Overall I liked it though, nice drop
I don't drop rhymes all the time, but when I do, I prefer to spit fire
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