help a nigga out

[citizenslain]

The moniker is slain. im from the south. raleigh 919 to be exact. and im just here to get some feedback from people who respect lyrical prowess.

-- Thu Apr 15, 2010 2:46 pm --

o yea heres a sixteen

my eyes closed but my eyelids show/ what everyone can think is knowledge but dont know/ and eveyone beleive they scholars but dont progress/ progression has its blocks its stepping stones in the process/ but i will never stop regression is not an option/ so tryin ta hold me down is forgiven but not forgotten/ cause kindness equals weakness in street terms/ so now my hearts cold as seasons when leafs turn/ from full of life to brillo padded like crack pipes/ the opposite of what defines it its black light/ and if its hard to define then trust it bring fright/ its terror to the left for the wing of the right/ its trying ta get bteer when better is in your mindstate/ blame it on your heart but decisions is what your mind make/ they blame it on the art say rappin raisin the crime rate/ but all im shootin off is these lyrics reciprocate man

[QwarterZ]

you could start by saying what up herb....


I'm kidding don't catch feelings
either way purdy dope gotta work on structure
........this SHOULD be posted in the Open Mic tho'
either way! catch you on the flipside zig zag zig

[MesaR]

I did not read it,

welcome to illest lyrics.