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Riggz expanded a new set of semantics to brandish
For bandits to take advantage after I hand’em a bandage
Damper your candid portrait or I damage the canvas
Surveying the mantra Replayin phrases draped in my manna
I play bananas even though the post is most apocalyptic
One should betroth props on drops that flow awfully optimistic
Jocks opt to miss it but in positions without degrees
My intentions to spot a sentence I didn’t allow to breed
I was content to let it run leave vultures under the gun
Freeze the tundra to tongues and even run with the bums
But umm I lit up the firmament with terms of endearment
Tell’em “Thats a nice verse” while using sermons to steer them
For now my style is on the house without risk of tracking anklets
Misogynist, pop a pimp when they insist on slapping language
Vanquish scores to settle broken down with mortar and pestle
If Riggz ever sign to a Major, it’ll be more to embezzle

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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

shit was ill man i liked the whole thing, i think the flow got choppy wit like 3 words when i read the first time but the second time was much better
i'll smack yuh with rage i force multis outta my ass to the page
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Riggz expanded a new set of semantics to brandish
For bandits to take advantage after I hand’em a bandage
Damper your candid portrait or I damage the canvas
Surveying the mantra Replayin phrases draped in my manna
I play bananas even though the post is most apocalyptic
One should betroth props on drops that flow awfully optimistic


dope, dope, and doper.. whole shit was bonkers man, opener kill em tho.. definately skills shinning thru.. nice drop riggz multis, content the whole shit

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Yo Riggz! this was crazy you really getting up there
I'm diggin' errythin' you writing!
I remember how you started off and now your just snappin' on these ishes

killer intro! keep writing!
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Post by Loon E Lou »

dope shit amigo. sumtn i enjoyed readin. elevated flo and errything. this the type of shit i like homie so keep doin what u do. shiiiit. u help me wit my text, ill help u on ur productions. haha. dope dawg. keep it lit homie
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Post by Vaughn »

That was hard... I been takin the temperature of this site a lickel bit.. and you seem to be one of the nicest... peace bro.
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Loon E Lou wrote:dope shit amigo. sumtn i enjoyed readin. elevated flo and errything. this the type of shit i like homie so keep doin what u do. shiiiit. u help me wit my text, ill help u on ur productions. haha. dope dawg. keep it lit homie
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Vaughn wrote:That was hard... I been takin the temperature of this site a lickel bit.. and you seem to be one of the nicest... peace bro.
Underrated I would Say Vaughn, I set the battle up for us. Hope I can deliver the same emotions in my battles.
qwarterzone wrote:Yo Riggz! this was crazy you really getting up there
I'm diggin' errythin' you writing!
I remember how you started off and now your just snappin' on these ishes

killer intro! keep writing!
When you start off on sites like these, you gotta get a feel of what's goin on. I found that simplicity wasn't the best for ILLEST. It's actually got very skillful writers.
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dope, dope, and doper.. whole shit was bonkers man, opener kill em tho.. definately skills shinning thru.. nice drop riggz multis, content the whole shit

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Defi, I'm one who appreciates your shit too.. so keep droppin
~Symbolikull~ wrote:shit was ill man i liked the whole thing, i think the flow got choppy wit like 3 words when i read the first time but the second time was much better
Wow, three times to get the flow.. i must be slippin.. I'll work on it Syms.. thanks.
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Post by MOEstradamus »

this shit was nice bro good multis nothing really forced at good shit id say 8.5/10 goodshit
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Post by - Mutual - »

yeah nice flow on this got better in the middle then went a very lil bit downhill but over all dope multies and a very nearly consistent flow done well my man riggz we'll have to collab some time on scripts
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Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Preciate it Moe/Mutual. Thanks for checkin' it out.
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Post by MesaR »

good shit, vocabulary was a stand out i think, multi's were on par. it was a decent read man that's for sure, the opener was pretty sick kept me intrested, flow got abit choppy.. but it didnt really effect the written.. stay up.
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Post by Haz »

Riggz expanded a new set of semantics to brandish
For bandits to take advantage after I hand’em a bandage
Damper your candid portrait or I damage the canvas

Cool cool,


One should betroth props on drops that flow awfully optimistic

Disagree.


Jocks opt to miss it but in positions without degrees
My intentions to spot a sentence I didn’t allow to breed

LoL

I was content to let it run leave vultures under the gun
Freeze the tundra to tongues and even run with the bums

What you mean to Tongues? ..


But umm I lit up the firmament with terms of endearment
Tell’em “Thats a nice verse” while using sermons to steer them

Nah.


For now my style is on the house without risk of tracking anklets
Misogynist, pop a pimp when they insist on slapping language

Like this.


Vanquish scores to settle broken down with mortar and pestle
If Riggz ever sign to a Major, it’ll be more to embezzle

Could of came with a better Banger...


Anyways i just thought this was put Together Poorly, in My own opinion.
Feel like you focused so Much on inners n connecting 2 lines together that u took away Solidness from a Overall Verse,
The vocab was Cool, multis was Aiight.

Anyways i've Seen U Drop Better but this Was Decent.

Stay Up N Keep Dropping
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Post by complexity »

The rhyming side was a throwback to some past MC's from the scriptures. The transitions, flow, and ideas were all lucid. I enjoyed this piece.

Keep dropping.

"I play bananas even though the post is most apocalyptic
One should betroth props on drops that flow awfully optimistic
Jocks opt to miss it but in positions without degrees
My intentions to spot a sentence I didn’t allow to breed"
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Post by ReFleXiOn »

damn your flow was fuckin' nuts on this, it came off my tongue so smoothly. vocab was not too shabby, wordplay was there, multis, you name it, this had it, well, mostly. But anyway...

"I play bananas even though the post is most apocalyptic
One should betroth props on drops that flow awfully optimistic
Jocks opt to miss it but in positions without degrees
My intentions to spot a sentence I didn’t allow to breed"
^that right there is what had me like "whoa" haha. nice drop dunny. 1
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Post by Riggz »

ReFleXiOn wrote:vocab was not too shabby,
Haha, guess I'll have to up my distorted cerebration. :twisted:
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