10 Lines of Hell

[360]

I attack with an ax wearin' a Mayan mask
I'll chop your spine in half, then go watch the women fire dance
I spit flames atop a volcanic cliff face
drinkin' gin straight from a flask with a lizard skin case
gettin' shit faced while the sky begins t'spit rain
The sun is settin', so it's almost time t'start the hunting session
I'm sharpening weapons with 4 points and 7 edges
They're called hunga mungas and they gleam underneath la luna
You're a chunka tuna floatin' off the coastline of Cuba
I'm a great white that's gonna snap my jaws right through ya

[Quix]

I attack with an ax wearin' a Mayan mask
I'll chop your spine in half, then go watch the women fire dance
I spit flames atop a volcanic cliff face
drinkin' gin straight from a flask with a lizard skin case
gettin' shit faced while the sky begins t'spit rain



this shit had great flow!! you lost me on the last part though!


Nice drop!

[mcearlgrey]

yeah i'm with the consensus here, the last three lines fell off hard, beginning was excellent.

[360]

I appreciate the feedback..

[QwarterZ]

This was purdy nice, I really can't pick it apart since erryone else did...

but I like the beginnin' its like you reciting history to all the young'ns definitly on of my favorite aspects in certain rhymes keep writing!