look

[Explicit59]

look; there's the 5-0
i'll smoke em up like they are 5 0s
a nine bro, i increase 4 but what 4
i dont know dawg, just bark at the war

i aint smart, and i aint lyrical
but retards will bow and i'll be the sentinal
and now look, an s.o.s on a hospital rooftop
definet illest, shouts the blocks

[Lawgix]

wow dude u need some MAJOR improvement its too simplistic man... surf around the site... check out Center Of Elevation... they gotta TON of DIY and FAQ's u can check up on... just work at it u'll get better...

[-MenaCe-]

You need to get better kid and make ya drops longer and tougher..

[MOEstradamus]

yea you need to lengthn ya rhymes but at least this drop had a multi in it start using more of them and develop a rhyme scheme for your self man get ur own style check thru the scrips look up

check out anyone to see some good flow and rhyme schemes

check out ppl like
ruckus
phasewon
complexity
quix
and other ppl
to see good punches and flow

check out
cee4
scottjames
arvincable
and rell

to see good world play and creativity

check out ppl like
lawgix
tretru
menace

for good delivery yo can go almost anywhere on this site and see good things to learn from so good luck