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Close Ya Eyes...

Post by -MenaCe- »

Just sit bak N relapse on every track you produce or you Feel is the Truth..
Isn't appealing to you! RETIRE!! Wit my fire you'll have to be Peeled from the Booth!!

The shit is heatin up for this weaklin fuck not seen as tough my hits strike from all angles rushin..
Fuk ya bank roll cuzin i aint gonna burn ya bridge Id rather hurt this kid and watch Em' Dangle From It!!(avy)

Bitch!! your pussy claimin and reppin your section full of ah bunch niggaz that are Bitch Made..
None of ya shits played Damage mine? Na! you couldn't "cut It" wit a Samuria and Switch Blade!!

Swear your G but apparently thats not the case not by a Long Shot wit a False plot..
Screamin Fuck THA Police and his whole fleet proceeds to puttin the beats on The Mall Cop!!(LOL)

And we all seen Haz's transition to Ann Bitchin once he finally found out it wasn't his Ass Drippin..
balls N tha Shaft missin no fibbin now he just sits at the computer brushin his Hair Dissin!!..(LoL,Fag)

Other crews that you can't get above or move gettin fustrated with ya self n ya Tired Taste..
Take ya raps and hide away cause the only time ya shit is hot is when i toss it in the Fire Place!!..

Real Talk why you still doin it? wasn't it enuff when quix ripped ya whole skit and Ruined It?
Nobody'll hold a lighter to this lame and while i grow tighter to the game you'll always have a Looser Fit!!..

So the truth of the matter is if you could imagine this your bein shut down, deleted, Fully Terminated..
Take this as a lesson learned It'll be the last step you earn if you ever say my name or any Words related!!..




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Re: Close Ya Eyes...

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boom dope bery nice punches
not really personals
but all the same very nice mayne
keep'em comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Re: Close Ya Eyes...

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i agree with mutual it was good it picked up more at the end and i did see a couple personals about quix whoppin his ass good shit
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Re: Close Ya Eyes...

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Ooo yeah i missed that bear the first time lol strange
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Real Talk why you still doin it? wasn't it enuff when quix ripped ya whole skit and Ruined It?
Nobody'll hold a lighter to this lame and while i grow tighter to the game you'll always have a Looser Fit!!..

ill ^^ N tRUe!!
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Thnx for the feed I.M....Uppin!
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Just sit bak N relapse on every track you produce or you Feel is the Truth..
Isn't appealing to you! RETIRE!! Wit my fire you'll have to be Peeled from the Booth!!

This is amazing, great focusin the attention, not really a diss, but it was nice, had perfect flow.

The shit is heatin up for this weaklin fuck not seen as tough my hits strike from all angles rushin..
Fuk ya bank roll cuzin i aint gonna burn ya bridge Id rather hurt this kid and watch Em' Dangle From It!!(avy)

Nice ending rhymes, the setup was kinda weak tho

Bitch!! your pussy claimin and reppin your section full of ah bunch niggaz that are Bitch Made..
None of ya shits played Damage mine? Na! you couldn't "cut It" wit a Samuria and Switch Blade!!

This sounds like an Eminem rip off!

Swear your G but apparently thats not the case not by a Long Shot wit a False plot..
Screamin Fuck THA Police and his whole fleet proceeds to puttin the beats on The Mall Cop!!(LOL)

Good punch, you shoulda put the fuck the 5-0 in the first line tho

And we all seen Haz's transition to Ann Bitchin once he finally found out it wasn't his Ass Drippin..
balls N tha Shaft missin no fibbin now he just sits at the computer brushin his Hair Dissin!!..(LoL,Fag)

Weak

Other crews that you can't get above or move gettin fustrated with ya self n ya Tired Taste..
Take ya raps and hide away cause the only time ya shit is hot is when i toss it in the Fire Place!!..

Played but funny!

Real Talk why you still doin it? wasn't it enuff when quix ripped ya whole skit and Ruined It?
Nobody'll hold a lighter to this lame and while i grow tighter to the game you'll always have a Looser Fit!!..

Could see where you were going, but bringing in Quix took away from the punch. Nice attempt though

So the truth of the matter is if you could imagine this your bein shut down, deleted, Fully Terminated..
Take this as a lesson learned It'll be the last step you earn if you ever say my name or any Words related!!..

I liked this bar, it was nice, and the enders were very efficient.

Overall, the punches were weak, but you straight swagged on him. Good ups. Only thing I suggest is relating your setups to the connects. P'z
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Thnx^^ Uppin!
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This was actually a pretty good script dude props..
had some funny punches and all, i like the flow though
and some pretty clean schemes in there...

And we all seen Haz's transition to Ann Bitchin once he finally found out it wasn't his Ass Drippin..
balls N tha Shaft missin no fibbin now he just sits at the computer brushin his Hair Dissin!!..(LoL,Fag)
^^^
probably the hardest line IMO..pretty funny too..

all in all a nice drop..
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Good Looks Tre...Uppin!
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-MenaCe- wrote:Just sit bak N relapse on every track you produce or you Feel is the Truth..
Isn't appealing to you! RETIRE!! Wit my fire you'll have to be Peeled from the Booth!!

[Oh. That was a sick line]

The shit is heatin up for this weaklin fuck not seen as tough my hits strike from all angles rushin..
Fuk ya bank roll cuzin i aint gonna burn ya bridge Id rather hurt this kid and watch Em' Dangle From It!!(avy)

Bitch!! your pussy claimin and reppin your section full of ah bunch niggaz that are Bitch Made..
None of ya shits played Damage mine? Na! you couldn't "cut It" wit a Samuria and Switch Blade!!

[I don't know how this line is stole from Eminem, its a cool line though, creative punch]

Swear your G but apparently thats not the case not by a Long Shot wit a False plot..
Screamin Fuck THA Police and his whole fleet proceeds to puttin the beats on The Mall Cop!!(LOL)

[I didn't find this line that humorous, I'll let it speak for itself without further comment]

And we all seen Haz's transition to Ann Bitchin once he finally found out it wasn't his Ass Drippin..
balls N tha Shaft missin no fibbin now he just sits at the computer brushin his Hair Dissin!!..(LoL,Fag)

[A bit wordy]

Other crews that you can't get above or move gettin fustrated with ya self n ya Tired Taste..
Take ya raps and hide away cause the only time ya shit is hot is when i toss it in the Fire Place!!..

[Very effective punch, although it wasn't that personal]

Real Talk why you still doin it? wasn't it enuff when quix ripped ya whole skit and Ruined It?
Nobody'll hold a lighter to this lame and while i grow tighter to the game you'll always have a Looser Fit!!..

[Hold a lighter is a good thing, right? Good bar]

So the truth of the matter is if you could imagine this your bein shut down, deleted, Fully Terminated..
Take this as a lesson learned It'll be the last step you earn if you ever say my name or any Words related!!..

[Original punch right there]


Fall Back.....

Overall. I liked it.

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Bitch!! your pussy claimin and reppin your section full of ah bunch niggaz that are Bitch Made..
None of ya shits played Damage mine? Na! you couldn't "cut It" wit a Samuria and Switch Blade!!
the reason he said sounds ripped from eminem becuz in the song cry now which is produced by eminem but has obie, stat, bobby creekwater, and someone else and he doesnt even say switch blade it doesnt even have the same concept but the flow and set up makes it kinda sound like dey are the same. becuz the rhyme style when he spit it sounds like this. this isnt ripped its just really well writin and hes just thinkin good shit
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M.O.E wrote:
Bitch!! your pussy claimin and reppin your section full of ah bunch niggaz that are Bitch Made..
None of ya shits played Damage mine? Na! you couldn't "cut It" wit a Samuria and Switch Blade!!
the reason he said sounds ripped from eminem becuz in the song cry now which is produced by eminem but has obie, stat, bobby creekwater, and someone else and he doesnt even say switch blade it doesnt even have the same concept but the flow and set up makes it kinda sound like dey are the same. becuz the rhyme style when he spit it sounds like this. this isnt ripped its just really well writin and hes just thinkin good shit
that "someone else" is Ca$his...
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thank u i couldnt remember
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Re: Close Ya Eyes...

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thats awsome, bar 2 is dope as hell.
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