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Real talk after my dream

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Listening to its words I get mixed signals so i check the thesaurus
rythm'd it a chorus, everyone pulled their sticks n mine was da shortest
It was a mistake thinkin it'll relate or replace an empty cemetary
Maybe it'd get me out of this grave, vou'd Id stay but it smiled to say'..
"im goin back to where i was, where Im from, me and you are done"
I became subject of experiment, a failure of a pharaoh in a busted pyramid
so i glanced into a mirrior-n-its, obvious I only wanted appearances
I feel irrelevant even in my own reminiss, i was neglegant on rememberin'..
all the happy days without questionin myself but now Im pressurin wrestlin
Im hesitant on acceptin-this, I never wanna come back But i keep attendin-it
pretendin-its not my fault, cuz in my skull are creations of self
walken dis life with bruises and welts, I alienated everyone else
when it rains Im sore, so betrayed I swore, it aint gon happen again
Till I make amends, create what I intend to do with life with no freinds
Its harsh what sadness does, Im so fuckin damaged-from
wat my status-was, and now Im being taken advantage of

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Re: Real talk after my dream

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this is dope
nice imagery
the rhymescheme started well
fell off slightly
but this had sum dope lines

Listening to its words I get mixed signals so i check the thesaurus
rythm'd it a chorus, everyone pulled their sticks n mine was da shortest
It was a mistake thinkin it'll relate or replace an empty cemetary
Maybe it'd get me out of this grave, vou'd Id stay but it smiled to say'..

^fire shyt

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Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
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