New Verse, need comments

[TheBigHurt~]

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/business-vt12821.html

You know you aint got no southern drawl right?
That what you got compared to me is alright.
You prolly poppin bottles, pill poppin, poppin them hoes right?
You try'n to live like pinchy, it's a shame to watch you do so.
I eye'd you from the sky pirched up on my deuce-o's
hoes hangin out your windows waves me good-bye, as I blow by.
In retrospect I think that you might be alright.
Afterall your just try'n to ball right?
Id like to meet the ladies with you if that'd be alright,
Tell'm id love to love'm all night.
That pinchy's lovin is something all together primo, that if we go
I'd show her moves that she think only she know.
Pinchy needs a tight girl fix.
Girl let me put my tounge between your girl lips.
Put my mouth on your all white pearl pill,
Swallow and go hard until that girl squeal.
You love the fact that ima give you this dick still,
You gonna gush at how this dick feel.
Let me show you how getting loved feels.
Love hurts and I know you'll love how getting hurt feels.
Don't let my words ruin your skirt, TOO LATE, extend to meet you,
It's time to treat you,
girl hop in so I can meet you,
You need to ride with me,
so I can ride you.

They call me LiL PinChy, lil pimpin divine,
Takin my time. Tick-Tock,
To drip drop them panties, listen to them hoes whine.
I make'm nut in no time, Baby its show time.
Maby ladies such as yourselves, Top Shelf, I mean Top Shelves,
will take it upon yourselves, to take the party below the belt.
I feel you up, fill you up, one at a time.
REWIND, RIIICK-ROOOCKKK
I flip flop the beat, open shop, post up nonstop, refine the beat.
ALL FROM THE BACKSEAT.
CHECK THAT. on your stats sheet,
YOU CANT. there aint no stats on the back streets.

You prolly thinking PinChy only got hoes on his mind,
Its true, but I got money on my mind too.
all it takes is a flash of the belt line, Beretta 92FS
addressed to you, attest to you, comin on my streets regardless.
Best bets for you's to drop money on the floor you tarnished.
My raps got relish and garnish
My rhymes too dope to harness
sky up, sky up

would love sum comments

[TheBigHurt~]

edit.

[ugly]

weird structure, common concept, cool lines

They call me LiL PinChy, lil pimpin divine,
Takin my time. Tick-Tock,
To drip drop them panties, listen to them hoes whine.
I make'm nut in no time, Baby its show time.
Maby ladies such as yourselves, Top Shelf, I mean Top Shelves,
will take it upon yourselves, to take the party below the belt. "

^^ liked this part, 5/10

[GrimBlaze]

structure is better than last time,the substance isnt really my bag but its an improvement on your last piece.
keep droppin.1.

[NoVeL]

PinChy this iz thA best part of the drop 2 Me


I flip flop the beat, open shop, post up nonstop, refine the beat.
ALL FROM THE BACKSEAT.
CHECK THAT. on your stats sheet,
YOU CANT. there aint no stats on the back streets.

- NoVeL