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We used to have a thing going at an old forum i dropped lyrics on.. like a daily keystyle thread..some themed..some just writing any old shit, it worked well and i know im new but i see some talent here and reckon it would work..some of the poetry heads may want in as well

seein as its 2.40 here (im in the UK) ill call this one sunday keys..

life flashes in glimpses..like take a blink and you missed it
you pissed because you stop to think about what it consisted
an try to twist it..regrets are for the weaker kind
with feeble minds..not forgettin shit they leaving behind
im sleepless in nights..tossing and turning everytime
its like immortality the way my conscience works overtime
my toil of a deep mind ponders every decision
wanders diction of scriptures written by all ancient religions
i hate the schism of thoughts imprisoned by our society..
cold foes have risen to quickly rob us of our minds being free
im tired you see - since when cant my mind form an opinion
instead its formulated by the governments dominion
we just the minions..irrelevant of global recognition
through the mission of restricting affairs to merely politicians
its hard to diss em..specially when they control the worlds state
and dedicate their efforts towards ensuring their own fate
i desecrate the social bounds i feel constricting my presence
these thoughts are incessant..shit im no adolescent
but in the worlds eyes..whats important is stature and size
my raps are prized..while my politics just sink to demise


lol..reaaall rusty..need to get back in to the swing of things..

leave feed..drop a verse..carry on from where i left off or do your own thang..whatever..
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this piece was str8 i really liked this barr

"my toil of a deep mind ponders every decision
wanders diction of scriptures written by all ancient religions"

that shit was good almost tongue twistin
but other than that the flow was off in some points but over all good for not rhymin for a while
keep the drops coming
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Re: Drop your keys

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We used to have a thing going at an old forum i dropped lyrics on.. like a daily keystyle thread..some themed..some just writing any old shit, it worked well and i know im new but i see some talent here and reckon it would work..some of the poetry heads may want in as well

seein as its 2.40 here (im in the UK) ill call this one sunday keys..
Logic wrote:life flashes in glimpses..like take a blink and you missed it
you pissed because you stop to think about what it consisted
an try to twist it..regrets are for the weaker kind
with feeble minds..not forgettin shit they leaving behind
im sleepless in nights..tossing and turning everytime
its like immortality the way my conscience works overtime
my toil of a deep mind ponders every decision
wanders diction of scriptures written by all ancient religions
i hate the schism of thoughts imprisoned by our society..
cold foes have risen to quickly rob us of our minds being free
im tired you see - since when cant my mind form an opinion
instead its formulated by the governments dominion
we just the minions..irrelevant of global recognition
through the mission of restricting affairs to merely politicians
its hard to diss em..specially when they control the worlds state
and dedicate their efforts towards ensuring their own fate
i desecrate the social bounds i feel constricting my presence
these thoughts are incessant..shit im no adolescent
but in the worlds eyes..whats important is stature and size
my raps are prized..while my politics just sink to demise
Nice drop homie.

That whole part was pretty thought-provoking. My own problem with the drop besides I'd like to see some more complex rhyming, is the fact, that you didn't give us a detailed reason on why you believe anything you said. I'm definitely not an MC that you want to model yourself after, but I would emphasis on doing so and it helped the readers understand better.
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safe for the feed boys..lets see your ish! take ten and drop some knowledge..
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on that note heres another..its a key dont watch the content just trying to get the flow back! jump on this!


fall asleep..my dreams creep to different places i visit
envisage varied locations through the realm of my spirit
it helps to distinguish between the facet of body and mind
the folly of mine..is leaving my physical to decline
into stimulants and drugs..no love for reality's domain
my bodys tame but my brain is raped by thoughts so insane
my haughtyness claims..that im the freshest to bless this cypher
kids die for skills im possessing..an im just getting tighter
but thats besides the point i light a joint and im back to visit
my spirits kindred with thinkers of atronomics and physics
you rotten just admit it..judging me for my actions
these macs you pack dont count for shit..i split your words into fractions
distractions dont faze me..your lazy in this game son
your played-puns dont weigh-tons..you lose in this liason
your fate-done..start thinking of a new profession
my devil spits hexing your writtens without no confession
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