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yo
Posted: Mon Mar 23, 2009 12:26 pm
by repteelay
cut ya throat so fast ya scream in silence
not even in ya most decievin dreams could you c this violence
couldnt stop it if u creep with riots
of people on ya team comin ta make me bleed
no ease im sinical, dispensin my bullits i bet
my clip is full..... hit me 4 a battle im here
Posted: Tue Mar 24, 2009 9:10 am
by Charlie Da Genieus
listen REPTEELAY
i got something to say
this is how yo rhymz sound
so its comin out gay/
sorry to intrude
but it needs to get fixd
here comes BOB DA BUILDER
n its lookin like this/
this is where your wrong
your structure needs to improve/
it needs a vision of a GENIEUS
n dat person aint you/
for just a one time fee
ill let you battle wit me/
ill let you say you flowed against
da dopest rapper to breath/
see my flow is smooth/
n so many agree
im like a LIFE LINE wit REGIS
but wit out KATHY LEE/
If there comes a time
dat your backs against da wall/
dont let my smash
to your REP/
hinder you to call/
it took some nutz to call someone
to battle on this site/
so now you not an enemie
to me
you alright/
Posted: Tue Mar 24, 2009 12:59 pm
by ugly
dont ever put bob the builder in ur raps. No length in ur bars, weird structure. And the flow was off each line just made it worse. I dont know wat to tell you, just provide us with that flows and fuck the punchlines n metaphores
1/10
Posted: Tue Mar 24, 2009 3:07 pm
by Charlie Da Genieus
Not even on ma level kid...But ill take the criticism anytime...
DEE DEEDEE...
Posted: Wed Mar 25, 2009 3:17 am
by ugly
on ur level?? lol then right sumthin worth reading
Posted: Wed Mar 25, 2009 4:51 am
by Charlie Da Genieus
You want a sic topic..I got you...