Kkien Buska Ayuda, Freestyle

[3lmo]

Its still missin some effect so its not finished, I noticed myself, that my attention goes to the beat and I dont hear myself no more, so Im going to add some more voice over the vocals, if you get me.....but please be honest.....

its dat niga 3lmo comin for the premio
you aint even close but u say que ya mero
whats the meal, watch me point a dedo
es that crazy mexicano comin from that pueblo
im spottin every single hater in the crowd
you cryin like bitch,how can yo folks be proud
you say u in the game,- but im still askin how
I stay busting rounds have your head swinging right round
baby right round have yo body upside down
spill so much blood this dude bout to drown
so many fish in the sea but Im not into fishing
god wouldnt be with you even if your name was chrisitan
no I aint dissen,I bet ya ass be wishin
dat ya name be in my mouth, but no I stay spittin
I dont charge shippin but I handle well
the motion of the ocean like a ship sale

Rap is my bitch im tryin to take er to divorce court
these tracks are my kids but they need some damn fan support
let me in aint no way that you can stop me
Im ya daddy, sonny, you can call me papi
get you some of this
it aint navidad, but you still lookin feliz
yes Ima freak,what you think about it
rubbers in my pocket, never leave home without em
I want it tight like some rolls on a nigga
dont take it wrong, dont be sucha trippa,
cuz I can go killa,give you a lil thrilla,
make ya as shiver,and feel it in ur liver

ill walk right through the door call me casper
Ill have ya ass askin me what the fak Im after
the big bad coyote,I dont fuck with that drug shit
when the train runs you the first one in line bitch
you heard of me, if u havent well here I am
in the flesh,comin fresh like bologne,and ham
I can serve you up right quick like yall aint never been
you a lil chump, watch me stay a man
I lie cheat and steal, I gots to hustle this
yall nigas are G's, well I neva was cuz im is
life aint fair cuz yall niggas really got an option
let me get this clear,take some caution
cuz what im causing can really be non-stoppin
have yall putos droppin, like HBO boxin
drop dead in your coffin,
ive been rappin from 2000 and ever since
I got dirty bitches tryin to rinse

[Petrafyne]

Okay....
Umm Yea....
Well....I Thought It Was Obvious You Were Trying To Imitate Wayne So Lets Get That Out Of The Way.
I Say You Were On Time And For A Freestyle To Me That's Good, Even Though It Sounds Like Your Readin Most Of It, But Even If You Are It's Still Okay.
Keep It Up And Just Be Your Self, I'd Like To Hear More.

[3lmo]

yeah I was readin it off my notepad, I didnt know it was that obvious....I cant remember lyrics that well, Im not gonna even try..thanks

[3lmo]

I guess no one else like it

[Cuttin P]

yea man this is definately so Wayne inspired shit lol

anyway... i can tell you reading too... cause of how ya flow comes off and the tone of ya voice has no inflection at all. i usually don't record shit till after i just about memorized it. It helps with the flow and vibe alot! cause honestly it's difficult to read ya verse which you barely know AND stay on beat cause you'll spead hella effort makin sure you don't mess up ya words or get lost reading that you focus less on the beat

[3lmo]

yeah I know, its never been easy for me to remmember lyrics

[Kurse]

Ain't nuthin wrong with reading off the pad. I do it for more than half of my songs. The key is to spit it with enough emotion and enough energy so it doesn't sound like it's coming off like you're reading the shit. Just use the lyrics as a reference...not as a primary tool.

Agreed...I hear alot of Lil Wayne influence in this track. From the shitty sample on the beat to the choppy flow. No offense my nigga...but I give this track maybe a 2/10

...and it's not hate my nigga. I wanna see you elevate and I wanna still see you drop material here on illest. But drop something that's going to be worth peoples time listening to. People don't wanna hear Lil Wayne. We already have a Lil Wayne. And most people don't like the one we have now! lol So you definately don't wanna mimic or mirror your style and swagger after that guy! Be you're own entity bruh...spit some real lyrics on some good beats with some solid feeling and you'll do fine.

Keep doing you pimpin.

[3lmo]

but what yall think about the lyrics??