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[Lotus]

sittin back, untwist the cap, thinkin of poppin these pills,
til ive gotten my fill, n I can calm down n chill
idk about suicide, thas an impossible kill,
n if I DO survive, thas a hospital bill.
fuck it, ill go to the 10th story hallway window n jus hop from the sill.
n if i die as planned, I'll tell god I did it all for the thrills,
"I wanted to feel, what it's like to fall n then spill"
hell either send me to hell for wastin all of my skill,
or hell commend me for bein strong in my will

fuck bitches, they talk TWO much, cuz they got two pairs of lips,
tell my girl im goin out, she all about the who, where, n when,
"im goin to fuck some other bitches, we'll see how you compare to them!
WHAT! you thought i'd be too scared to admit?"
"but that's not even fair, you're a dick!"
"FUCK YOU, we aint even married, you bitch!
I don't care for you, if you don't take CARE of the dick!
I'll go fuck a lesbian couple, have em SHARIN the dick!
thas some pussy no other dick TOUCHED before! YOU FUCKIN WHORE!
you should feel GRATEFUL for how long I fucked you for!"
[so thas it, fuck it, we're done, im gone,
dont wanna be lovestruck, jus wanna fuck some broads..*]
so I go out, get drunk at the bar, n pick up some more,
but I come back to my girls house, just to score...
who ever thought of monogomy? FUCK the Lord,
my girl walks in on me wit another bitch, I tell her "SHUT the door!"
shit I even fucked her raw, was too drunk to reach for the drawer..
so when the kids comin, I'm like "FUCK it! ABORT!
Doctor, doctor! PLEASE DONT CUT THE CORD!
I'm too young for this shit, havin a son is SUCH A CHORE!
BITCH if you was gonna have the fuckn kid ya shoulda left me UNINFORMED!
shit I can't help it if I like to fuck when I'm bored!"


who wanna see piles n piles of bodys stacked one on toppa the other,
like a warzone, sendin corpses home to widows n mothers,
fuck a daughter raw n GIZZ on the mother
jus kiddin… I know it seems obscene, i found my lips in a gutter,
jabber jaw, talkin bout drinkin too much alcohol n smackin broads,
bring em home n fuck em til their ass falls off
put a bag on her head jus to escape the sight of the acne on/ her face,
she like bein choked, bound, gagged, n taped up, caught on tape,
i told her "BITCH this aint a game, i came prepared wit LOCKS N CHAINS!"
she still in my basement, she never got away, but shes not a slave,
i jus keep her on so many drugs, she thinks shes lost in space...
jus so she cant escape n talk to the cops n call it rape,
matter of fact she never even got my name,
haha.. fuck the lineup! i fucked her eyes out so she cant spot my face!
i know, it's fucked up that i walked away, n got away with something so inhumane
but ill get you framed n pass the blame... who cares what the pastor's sayin?
i gotta nasty brain n i love to imaginate more than preteens love to masterbate!
so dont accusate n take for reality every last thing this cat creates...
i live in a video game, smashin crates, never stop to catch a break,
punch the gas not breaks, when will i stop, who knows,
sit back n have a drink, you gonna have to wait,
cuz i gotta knack for rap, im sayin, spit some shit thatll make ya ass insane
getting you all mad like ya goin super sayin.. lol fuck you n ya stupid sayings...

this is gonna be a freestyle.

to the slowest beat slow it down as i improve you fools n coach ya speech, im handin out free lessons, yeah kids take three guesses, aint ever seen this like green eggs n ham.. lol.. im the meanest kid sent to slam the tracks n
crack the minds of pretentious fans... i dont NEED fans, i been through the heat, if i dont make it, fuck it, im better off on the street.. tryin to find a job right now but fuck it im beat, spittin off the top right now, i jus cut off the beat. lol i got no money to speak of, so when i walk in a store i told that old ass whore, in 5 seconds i better see an open drawer, walk the fuck out dont even close the door, knock her out so hard when cops ask for my description she dont no more.. lol

[Glamtrash]

Well,

The first bit is filled with emoisms and teen angst, which make me laugh.

All I have to say about the second bit is that you should only use dick one time. Because rhyming it with bitch and then rhyming it again with dick immediately after, makes you look a little gay -- specifically given your topic at this point. Just sayin.

I like the third bit best, mainly because I'm a sado-masochist.
she like bein choked, bound, gagged, n taped up, caught on tape,
i told her "BITCH this aint a game, i came prepared wit LOCKS N CHAINS!"
^^This is hot.

I find that your little freestyle at the end is completely off-topic and pointless.

All in all it was all over the place, and I just can't get into your style of writing, but it wasn't the worst thing I've read.

[Lotus]

yeah im not that great at freestyle i was jus like fuck it ima rap bout bein broke as fuck. when i put effort into thinkin out a topic they come out good, though.

i think my style is jus better to get into through audio. text doesnt do it justice

[Cee4]

this was all over the place. kinda hard to feed coz for me it was up and down. i didnt like the whole bitch bitch dick dick shit. my favourite section was the first


sittin back, untwist the cap, thinkin of poppin these pills,
til ive gotten my fill, n I can calm down n chill
idk about suicide, thas an impossible kill,
n if I DO survive, thas a hospital bill.
fuck it, ill go to the 10th story hallway window n jus hop from the sill.
n if i die as planned, I'll tell god I did it all for the thrills,
"I wanted to feel, what it's like to fall n then spill"
hell either send me to hell for wastin all of my skill,
or hell commend me for bein strong in my will