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So many cats yet I hear all this barkin/
So many egos stuffed into a small compartment/
But you fall apart whenever yer name is said/
Displayin threats, confusin rap with the game of chess/
Deflate yer chest, quit actin like yer the boss of text/
When all yer beef makes Illest look like a sausage fest/
You've lost yer heads, tossed yer hopes and chances/
With no advances, both yer family trees have broken branches/
But you both keep rantin and makin excuses/
Too ignorant to see that what yer sayin is useless/
I'm just displayin the truth but you'll never get it/
You'll just sever heads with whatever method/
Diggin for dirt and shit to sway the site with/
Spendin day and night to designate who's the fake and righteous/
But its a waste of might, this shit is just so annoyin/
Spoken poison, quit bitchin, just do this shit for yer own enjoyment/

TheRuckus wrote:So many cats yet I hear all this barkin/
So many egos stuffed into a small compartment/
But you fall apart whenever yer name is said/
Displayin threats, confusin rap with the game of chess/
Deflate yer chest, quit actin like yer the boss of text/
When all yer beef makes Illest look like a sausage fest/
You've lost yer heads, tossed yer hopes and chances/
With no advances, both yer family trees have broken branches/

x-ray cats, lol. this whole section is off the wall son..dope. def came right. personally i wasnt feelin the end as much but it starts off with a kim kardasian bang. don't put the pen down.

nice drop, hopefully its a little wake up call to a few, i like that a-b-c format u used for the rhymescheme, came off nicer than most

LoL Funny Shit , Maintained a Decent FLow .. Multis Were Good .. Point Got Across ... Etc Etc ..

dog your shit is always flawless lol... through n through

i love the subliminal shots. lol

fuck that... this guy has THEE illest flow on ILL, PERIOD!!
flowed perfectly Fam...

Always like reading ur shit..

Again, I love the way you write.

When all yer beef makes Illest look like a sausage fest/


Lmao,,ayo that made me laugh..real talk..nice drop..i was feelin the flow..

dude wtf are you doin...damnit ghost write for somebody..
or record that shyt...cuz i'm gettin tired of sayin how
DAMN DOPE yopur ass is!!!...hahahaha..
seriously though fukn ridiculously flawless..it's perfect
like jessica beil runnin around topless.. 4 real dude..


Deflate yer chest, quit actin like yer the boss of text/
When all yer beef makes Illest look like a sausage fest/
You've lost yer heads, tossed yer hopes and chances/
With no advances, both yer family trees have broken branches

^^all of it was tight but this concept w/the broken branches is ill
major..

nice drop dude

flow was on point, rhyme scheme was nasty...but lyrically it wasn't too exciting

good read tho homie

You don't need to be "lyrically exciting" to be dope. This is proof. Punches are overrated and overused. But I appreciate the feedback.

agreed.. punchlines has been the theme of illest lyrics, its like comedians without the rhymes..n e ways.. dope drop like i mentioned, nothin to extravagant yet the simplicity to it makes it appreciative in the areas it needs to be

Punchlines are overused, but you can almost never overuse wordplay, in my opinion.

I thought this was a talented piece. You broke down a situation happening on Illest in a common sense, smart, funny way.

The rhyme scheme was dope, you're real good with phrasing and not forcing rhymes as well.

i disagree that punchlines and wordplay are over used and over rated. in text u usually need something to make the verse standout. you however are one of a few who can make a verse standout without much use of them.

this verse was decent. i feel it could of been directed at me and hazard but could apply to a number of people. exceptional flow and you definitly make a good point.

standout bar was:
You've lost yer heads, tossed yer hopes and chances/
With no advances, both yer family trees have broken branches/
^^^^
ok the whole family tree plays been used plenty times before but i still like it lol