Welcome to Illest Lyrics forum established in 2005.
----
Free Vapes

The Anti-Merkige

Drop your written rhymes in one of the largest collections of original rhymes on the internet. The feedback in our Written Rhymes section will simply amaze you.

Moderators: Loon E Lou, Enlightend

Post Reply
User avatar
The Gonz
Flow Creation
Flow Creation
Offline
Posts: 1113
Joined: Fri Oct 03, 2008 2:33 pm
Wins: 1
Losses: 2000
Location: A position higher than you

The Anti-Merkige

Post by The Gonz »

So many cats yet I hear all this barkin/
So many egos stuffed into a small compartment/
But you fall apart whenever yer name is said/
Displayin threats, confusin rap with the game of chess/
Deflate yer chest, quit actin like yer the boss of text/
When all yer beef makes Illest look like a sausage fest/
You've lost yer heads, tossed yer hopes and chances/
With no advances, both yer family trees have broken branches/
But you both keep rantin and makin excuses/
Too ignorant to see that what yer sayin is useless/
I'm just displayin the truth but you'll never get it/
You'll just sever heads with whatever method/
Diggin for dirt and shit to sway the site with/
Spendin day and night to designate who's the fake and righteous/
But its a waste of might, this shit is just so annoyin/
Spoken poison, quit bitchin, just do this shit for yer own enjoyment/
User avatar
K.O.
Lyrical Sharpshooter
Offline
Posts: 614
Joined: Tue Mar 11, 2008 2:20 pm
Wins: 1
Losses: 0
Location: Chicago
Contact:

Re: The Anti-Merkige

Post by K.O. »

TheRuckus wrote:So many cats yet I hear all this barkin/
So many egos stuffed into a small compartment/
But you fall apart whenever yer name is said/
Displayin threats, confusin rap with the game of chess/
Deflate yer chest, quit actin like yer the boss of text/
When all yer beef makes Illest look like a sausage fest/
You've lost yer heads, tossed yer hopes and chances/
With no advances, both yer family trees have broken branches/
x-ray cats, lol. this whole section is off the wall son..dope. def came right. personally i wasnt feelin the end as much but it starts off with a kim kardasian bang. don't put the pen down.
Image
User avatar
Ambiguous Realm
Army Of Three
Offline
Posts: 3522
Joined: Sun Jan 15, 2006 3:57 pm
Wins: 46
Losses: 14
No Shows: 2
Location: Earth

Post by Ambiguous Realm »

nice drop, hopefully its a little wake up call to a few, i like that a-b-c format u used for the rhymescheme, came off nicer than most
Image
Haz
Supreme Lyricist
Offline
Posts: 6800
Joined: Mon Dec 18, 2006 1:41 am
Wins: 67
Losses: 70
Location: The Port

Post by Haz »

LoL Funny Shit , Maintained a Decent FLow .. Multis Were Good .. Point Got Across ... Etc Etc ..
Image
User avatar
Lotus
Elite Freestyler
Offline
Posts: 282
Joined: Sat Dec 13, 2008 1:52 pm
Wins: 1
Losses: 1

Post by Lotus »

dog your shit is always flawless lol... through n through
Image
User avatar
K.O.
Lyrical Sharpshooter
Offline
Posts: 614
Joined: Tue Mar 11, 2008 2:20 pm
Wins: 1
Losses: 0
Location: Chicago
Contact:

Post by K.O. »

i love the subliminal shots. lol
Image
User avatar
ScottJames
Army Of Three
Offline
Posts: 855
Joined: Sun Oct 19, 2008 11:07 am
Wins: 25
Losses: 3
No Shows: 1
Location: Seattle

Post by ScottJames »

fuck that... this guy has THEE illest flow on ILL, PERIOD!!
flowed perfectly Fam...

Always like reading ur shit..
Image
WINS:
Ekmos - KO ... Duc3 - KO ... Jesodist - KO ... MagicMark - KO ... Animul_Instinkz - KO ... Old Rotten - KO ... Dr Kevorkian - KO ... Ambition - KO ... Eclipse - KO ... Domino - 5-3 ... Crimson - KO ... MC Scars - KO ... Modern Defiance - KO ... Tempest - KO ... QwarterZ - KO ... TreTru - KO ... Quix - KO ... Grim/Leeroi Green - KO ... Knowmad - KO ... Cre@tiv3 - KO ... MVario - TKO ... Hazard - KO ... ER - KO ... Colossus - KO ... FlipSide - KO ... JackDaRippa - KO ... JSteel - KO ... Kau The Lion - KO ... 32Neilz - KO ... Evolution - TKO ... Shazo - KO ... CBK - KO
LOSSES:
Cee4 - 5-3
OVERALL:
31-1
Glamtrash
Poetic Juggernaut
Offline
Posts: 1498
Joined: Thu Nov 22, 2007 3:42 pm
Wins: 0
Losses: 0
Location: Where the Treetops Kiss the Stars

Post by Glamtrash »

Again, I love the way you write.
User avatar
Karnage
Rookie
Offline
Posts: 16
Joined: Wed Feb 11, 2009 1:43 pm
Wins: 0
Losses: 1
Location: 210 BitCh!..S.A

Post by Karnage »

When all yer beef makes Illest look like a sausage fest/


Lmao,,ayo that made me laugh..real talk..nice drop..i was feelin the flow..
Image
User avatar
TreTru
Rap Professional
Offline
Posts: 1608
Joined: Mon Dec 01, 2008 5:35 am
Wins: 9
Losses: 5

Post by TreTru »

dude wtf are you doin...damnit ghost write for somebody..
or record that shyt...cuz i'm gettin tired of sayin how
DAMN DOPE yopur ass is!!!...hahahaha..
seriously though fukn ridiculously flawless..it's perfect
like jessica beil runnin around topless.. 4 real dude..


Deflate yer chest, quit actin like yer the boss of text/
When all yer beef makes Illest look like a sausage fest/
You've lost yer heads, tossed yer hopes and chances/
With no advances, both yer family trees have broken branches

^^all of it was tight but this concept w/the broken branches is ill
major..
User avatar
Karmuh
Rookie
Offline
Posts: 10
Joined: Thu Feb 19, 2009 1:35 pm
Wins: 0
Losses: 0
Location: Barnegat, NJ

Post by Karmuh »

nice drop dude

flow was on point, rhyme scheme was nasty...but lyrically it wasn't too exciting

good read tho homie
User avatar
The Gonz
Flow Creation
Flow Creation
Offline
Posts: 1113
Joined: Fri Oct 03, 2008 2:33 pm
Wins: 1
Losses: 2000
Location: A position higher than you

Post by The Gonz »

You don't need to be "lyrically exciting" to be dope. This is proof. Punches are overrated and overused. But I appreciate the feedback.
User avatar
Ambiguous Realm
Army Of Three
Offline
Posts: 3522
Joined: Sun Jan 15, 2006 3:57 pm
Wins: 46
Losses: 14
No Shows: 2
Location: Earth

Post by Ambiguous Realm »

agreed.. punchlines has been the theme of illest lyrics, its like comedians without the rhymes..n e ways.. dope drop like i mentioned, nothin to extravagant yet the simplicity to it makes it appreciative in the areas it needs to be
Image
User avatar
complexity
Elevated
Offline
Posts: 9699
Joined: Mon Jan 02, 2006 9:09 am
Wins: 48
Losses: 15
Location: Maine
Contact:

Post by complexity »

Punchlines are overused, but you can almost never overuse wordplay, in my opinion.

I thought this was a talented piece. You broke down a situation happening on Illest in a common sense, smart, funny way.

The rhyme scheme was dope, you're real good with phrasing and not forcing rhymes as well.
Image

Check out our Vapes for great prices.
User avatar
Cee4
Rhyme Dominator
Offline
Posts: 2846
Joined: Thu May 31, 2007 9:52 pm
Wins: 58
Losses: 16

Post by Cee4 »

i disagree that punchlines and wordplay are over used and over rated. in text u usually need something to make the verse standout. you however are one of a few who can make a verse standout without much use of them.

this verse was decent. i feel it could of been directed at me and hazard but could apply to a number of people. exceptional flow and you definitly make a good point.

standout bar was:
You've lost yer heads, tossed yer hopes and chances/
With no advances, both yer family trees have broken branches/
^^^^
ok the whole family tree plays been used plenty times before but i still like it lol
Image
Image
Post Reply

Return to “Written Rhymes”

Who is online

Users browsing this forum: No registered users and 5 guests