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Lawgix - Sleepless Nights

Post by Lawgix »

i think it turned out fine... but i wanna hear what the general public has to say about it... lemme know gimme feed n i'll give feed back!!! thanx

P.S. i edited it cause i changed it up a bit... at the beginning... lemme know what u guys think!!!!
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Post by - Mutual - »

well u fed my shyt i'm here to return feed
well it was pretty good overall
the verses maybe a lil bit quiet
an the flanger typed shit u had on was weird
but yeah the lyrics from what i can hear
is pretty str8 so
keep'em comin dude i like this overall
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Post by Lawgix »

thanx man... appreciate the feedback... keep it comin!!!
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Post by Petrafyne »

The Overall Track Is Dope,
Dope Beat,
Dope Lyrics,
Dope Concept,
Just Spend More Time On The Hook And You Should Be Golden.
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Post by Lawgix »

thanx man... appreciate it... more feed would be appreciated
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dude i wanna feed this but i'm at werk right now...i'll get at ya later..
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Post by MesaR »

<i> yeah this was a solid track
beat was sick lyrics were good.
i sorta agree with the other dude tho.
i did not like the hook that much tbh.
anyways keep doing you. </i>
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Post by Lawgix »

cool thanx sequence good seein u semi back homie
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Post by Dead Silence »

i liked this
i liked the dif. style u used
singing kinda
its good shit
8.5/10
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Post by TreTru »

sorry it took me a minute..ay yo this was aight..
i liked the concept and the verses were straight..
it's just the hook that needs work IMO..good shyt though..
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Post by Kurse »

OoOoOoiiii...young lawgix is really learning the foundations of building solid songs! Another decent one from you with another decent concept. Where you pullin these out of kid!? You've really upped yo game! haha
I wouldn't say your sound is exactly marketable yet...but you're definately building solid underground rep. Throw together a mixtape son...seriously, I think your locals would definately cop that shit. Your gettin craftier with ur shit. I disagree wit a few of these kats though...i personally was feelin the hook!
Keep droppin kiddo...you've definately gotten sharper at this shit. Good to see you droppin frequestly again as well!
8.5/10 on the Lawgix Scale!
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Kurse wrote:OoOoOoiiii...young lawgix is really learning the foundations of building solid songs! Another decent one from you with another decent concept. Where you pullin these out of kid!? You've really upped yo game! haha
I wouldn't say your sound is exactly marketable yet...but you're definately building solid underground rep. Throw together a mixtape son...seriously, I think your locals would definately cop that shit. Your gettin craftier with ur shit. I disagree wit a few of these kats though...i personally was feelin the hook!
Keep droppin kiddo...you've definately gotten sharper at this shit. Good to see you droppin frequestly again as well!
8.5/10 on the Lawgix Scale!
wooooooow 8.5 outta 10!!!!!! that makes me feel happy... and its my b-day today homie good looks br0... and i'ma make it so that i'ma be marketable as fuck... i'm gunnin for a spot in AME... along with VI... when i get to Washington State... its gonna go DOWN!!!!!! thanx Big Kurse... always lookin out for ya feed back homie... peace!!!!
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

gotta say im impressed man good job..alot better then ive hurd from u in the past..i liked the hook tho as opposed to what others have said it was kool..lyrics were str8 dude,flow was on point from what i hurd. i wanna hear more man stay at it!
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Post by HKX »

8/10 shit was dope dawg da hook caught me off guard but shit went wit it like how u tried doin a tellin story track u gettin better on da craft dats da shit i wanna see homie keep droppin dawg jus follow wat ur doin and you'll be good homie 1
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Post by Lawgix »

thanx homie feeds much appreciated fam... yeah i'ma try to get one more dropped before i leave for Washington... n then when i get there its gonna BLOW THE FUCK UP!!! lol
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