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eMCee Havic
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Post by eMCee Havic »

an addict-of-rap magic as rabbits-in-hats
the habbits-u-act got you mad an just trapt
a screaming beast out side i am an animal
try and grasp the fact but i am just not tangible
my mandible allows sounds to combine n land-a-blow
a sample so you dont have-2-know leave it be a mystery
not even scooby doo could capture me i'll leave my mark on history
like i stole the deed to what your children read
and convinced um of my chivilry
my tendicies is to let your imagination lead-the-way
this evil demon's-plague will have you believe-in-faith
got fans like mice and what im spittin is cheese-suflae'
you need-2-pay more attention to what i say
cause everyday could be your last chance seize-tha-day
no redemption that conseption has drifted-past
like a last chance intervention if you high your did-ya-last
i shift-it-fast than kick-ur-ass when my 6's-blast
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Post by Jesodist »

Nice multies but you didnt stay on point and were'nt consistent with your bars you ideas were all over the place and the whole verse seem like a run on rap with no certain topic.
The flow was a bit confusing in some of the end of each bars because you quickly switched to another rhyming word, but maybe thats your style. I definately enjoyed the read it was worth my time and feed. Keep dropping homie i hope you practice more to perfect your skills.

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Post by - Mutual - »

yeah i agree^
the multies were a lil bit scattered
the flow wasnt consistent but it was still dope
shit some really dope vocab in there executed well
but u seemed to stray off point from what u started with
but it was a good read atleast better than ya last drop
keep'em comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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