Out On A Limb.

Borat · Post by **Borat** » Sun Dec 28, 2008 12:54 pm

I hope the length of this dosn't turn anyone away. If you do choose to read this, you won't be disappointed. leave feed please.

OUT ON A LIMB

Between my house and the end of the street
Is a journey, four front yards, three fences
And two bus stops away lived Kenneth.
Now Kenneth, he always used to say
â€œI once watched my mother die on this lawn.â€

Borat · Post by **Borat** » Tue Dec 30, 2008 9:04 am

Uppin for feed... someone answer my prayers.

Borat · Post by **Borat** » Sat Jan 03, 2009 11:30 am

thanks 4 the feed... cocks

Jesodist · Post by **Jesodist** » Sun Jan 04, 2009 12:51 am

Flow was a bit off in some parts dude i liked the pieces of imgery and metaphors you had. Sounded more than a poet than rap. Kinda deep i like reading raps like this caz they got a meaning to it, you probably should have explained some parts of it where you inserted some deep shit or imagery.

Good drop bro dont worry if people dont check ypur shit be proud of the work you did and it will pay off. Dont let people on this site bring you down just caz they dont check your shit.

Jesodist · Post by **Jesodist** » Sun Jan 04, 2009 12:51 am

Flow was a bit off in some parts dude i liked the pieces of imgery and metaphors you had. Sounded more than a poem than rap. Kinda deep i like reading raps like this caz they got a meaning to it, you probably should have explained some parts of it where you inserted some deep shit or imagery.

Good drop bro dont worry if people dont check ypur shit be proud of the work you did and it will pay off. Dont let people on this site bring you down just caz they dont check your shit.

Glamtrash · Post by **Glamtrash** » Sun Jan 04, 2009 9:22 am

Word dude.

At first I thought that you were falling off, but you pulled it all together beautifully at the end. Metaphorically speaking, it was amazing. Literally speaking, it was great. I also like how you worked dialogue into it. Mother nature is a bitchin' lady.

You have a lot of talent dude. Keep droppin'.

Also, nobody reads DC, so don't expect any miracles lol.

Borat · Post by **Borat** » Sun Jan 04, 2009 11:17 am

thank you for the feed, It means alot coming from a writer I enjoy to read. I have a couple more on the way... look for em.

oh... I know this is DC and no one leaves feed... I was just bored, it happens alot. ha

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