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crucial complex theory-of-rhyme
vision'll see it clearly-in-time
manifestations are waitin closely-aligned
i'm post-to-define
calibrated actions most-of-tha-time
the population will feel his-every-look
like history-books
getting burned by mysterious-crooks
im serious-look,
desperate desperation a hole sulkin nation
with out the asperation
to face exactly what it is we're facin
till we face devastation
or pass out from exasperation
need a leader-to-sieze a breeder-of-peace
instead of a deciever-an-thief
holding down a whole theature-wit-speach
but also feature-release
a bird-encaged usin a word-or-phrase
to curve-the-page without mergin-faith
but some always prefer-ta-hate
fuck em'
those to change are rebellious
and seldom are jealous to repell-us is hellish
critics say is to bizzar-to-work
the whole systems to scarred-n-hurt
to pos-sibl-e restart-tha-worth

This is my Theory
dont like it than dont listen
its my theory
size up its my fury
MY Theory
contact is mine purely
its my theory

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just a song im working on

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Post by Brah-Vo »

All in All, I was Feelin' This on The real.
Flow was so easy it wasn't funny, got some dope lines and imagery is cool.
Though if i were to criticize, 1 or 2 lines seemed abit forced and the flow was iffy in some parts coz the syllables didnt match but thats iight. I aint feelin the hook though. Maybe coz i aint got the beat with me but it just seems awkward.
Should sound better on audio.
But all in all i enjoyed readin this.
Keep up !
Overall about a 7.5-8/10.

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need a leader-to-sieze a breeder-of-peace
instead of a deciever-an-thief
holding down a whole theature-wit-speach

^^^
dope lines there but like you see how theatre is 3 syllables? Yeah didnt match with leader, breeder and deceiver. But its Koo nontheless.
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Post by eMCee Havic »

yeah i find its really how you say shit, in a flow..

but yeah that chorus was just some shit i came up wit real quick

thanks for the feed
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