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TreTru
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I keep it realer than real...

Post by TreTru »

I keep it realer than real, I spit iller than Ill.
I aint bankin on fabrications to make a mill.
I'd rather die a Tru ni99a is what I feel, and
Harbor, proper, dollars off of these mics that I kill.
but still, I gotta, I really gotta, push Harder
I spit hotta than saunas but still cant afford prada, and
maybe it's because I was smokin on marijuana, by the,
age of three, given to me, by my momma
or maybe it's because I grew up without a father
too busy poppin, his collar, he wasn't here to stop her
just another sample, of my real life drama, after
all the ishyt Ive seen I barely escaped the Karma,
I said it before no bling and I aint bothered,
I keep it Tru talk to the core a street scholar,
I keep it realer than real, I spit iller than ill
I aint bankin on fabrications to make a mill..
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Post by ScottJames »

um i didnt like this
im guessing ur just starting out..yes??
work on multis
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Post by Jesodist »

Well this was a lil weak you need to practice more.
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+InFLuenCe+
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Post by +InFLuenCe+ »

yeah their right you need to practice alot
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- Mutual -
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Post by - Mutual - »

just a little improvment really
i wasnt feelin that much
it jus was flowed well enough
but practise n keep'em comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Post by Glamtrash »

Better than the last one, but you do need practice. Keep em comin, shit'll work itself out.
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