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--Elevation--

Posted: Mon Oct 13, 2008 1:30 am
by Def-init
The light, caressing the tree lines above.
Twilight from a far, the translucent rays,
Travel by night, never the day
My loneliness unfaithful, I am floating now,
Drifting one could say. What is maturity without age?
What is ignorance without awareness?
I can hear the thunder over head, to soar in the sky,
To soar and be free. My journey won't last,
A new beginning is near.
My heart broken urges to be whole once more.
Why doesn't anyone see me? Why isn't anyone aware?
Invisible, inaccessible to all that dare.
This is my path and alone I must bare.
The rain dies silently, the lights fade away.
I can see the finish line, but I am unaware.
Unable to visualize, unable to care.
The cold sets in, the fire is gone.
A single tear on a lovers face.
My old visions diminish the grace.
There is no recourse, no turning back.
High above the sky, beyond the birds I lie.
A place for whispers, a place to die...

Posted: Fri Oct 17, 2008 7:51 am
by precise
this was awsome, damn, good use of vocabulary and structure

Drifting one could say. What is maturity without age?
What is ignorance without awareness?
^^^that was great

overall, really enjoyed readin it

Posted: Mon Oct 20, 2008 4:50 am
by - Mutual -
staright slaughter
ya vocab
this poem was great

Posted: Sat Dec 27, 2008 9:32 pm
by Def-init
thx guys... heh I aint in the DC area much so I missed your feed.

Thx again

Posted: Sun Jan 04, 2009 9:27 am
by Glamtrash
Nice use of vocabulary. Structure was really good. Good to see some more poets on the site. Good job dude.