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The light, caressing the tree lines above.
Twilight from a far, the translucent rays,
Travel by night, never the day
My loneliness unfaithful, I am floating now,
Drifting one could say. What is maturity without age?
What is ignorance without awareness?
I can hear the thunder over head, to soar in the sky,
To soar and be free. My journey won't last,
A new beginning is near.
My heart broken urges to be whole once more.
Why doesn't anyone see me? Why isn't anyone aware?
Invisible, inaccessible to all that dare.
This is my path and alone I must bare.
The rain dies silently, the lights fade away.
I can see the finish line, but I am unaware.
Unable to visualize, unable to care.
The cold sets in, the fire is gone.
A single tear on a lovers face.
My old visions diminish the grace.
There is no recourse, no turning back.
High above the sky, beyond the birds I lie.
A place for whispers, a place to die...
- If I can't bend Heaven, I shall move Hell. -
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Post by precise »

this was awsome, damn, good use of vocabulary and structure

Drifting one could say. What is maturity without age?
What is ignorance without awareness?
^^^that was great

overall, really enjoyed readin it
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Post by - Mutual - »

staright slaughter
ya vocab
this poem was great
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Post by Def-init »

thx guys... heh I aint in the DC area much so I missed your feed.

Thx again
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Post by Glamtrash »

Nice use of vocabulary. Structure was really good. Good to see some more poets on the site. Good job dude.
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