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Just Talkin' Shizznit

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Warning....Flux's Free Writes Are For Entertainment Purposes But Are Not To Be Taken Lightly...People Reading This Shouldn't While Wearing A Belt

Taken Me Lightly? Get Off I Impolitley Strike Fleets
And Counter Operatives With Objectives Nouns And Nice Sheets
Sorry For The Wackness If You Applaud Quit Feeding Me
Deviantly Exceede The Meet To Be The Best Emcee To Breath!
I Evily Reap And Repeatedly Seek Any Beat Which I Eat...To Eat!
I'm Not Hungry It's Just Somethin' To Do I Do It Easily!

*Cracks Fingers*

Literacy Intamicy Simplest Speech
Simpliy Spoke Intricatley And Infinitly!

God Damn It....Writer's Blocks A Bitch! Anyways Lets Try This Again!

Trouble To Rhyme? Now I'm Crushin' A Line
With My Preccusions And Mind It's Nothin' Am I?
Void And Ultimatley Kill Or To Be
Realer Then Me? Please My Skillz Is Supreme
Without The Stretch In Text...You Shocked Each Bar Sets A Threat!
Allergic, But I'll Make You Breath Again With A Jab From An Epipen!
Must It Be Said Again? Alluring And Sediment, Sodium
Salty Looks From The Critics Who Want My Neck And Head. Over Um!
Settled Upon The Podeum The Pendulum Swingun! Hittin'
Gun Slingin' I'm Showin' Um, I'm Not One To Be Kiddin'!

Fuck...Well I'll Give This A Try Later Until Then...LOVE IT BITCHES lol
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Post by Brah-Vo »

I thought it was pretty dope. The multis were nice and ya punches were pretty sick.
Havent really heard from you but this showqs you skilled.

Nice shit.

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Taken Me Lightly? Get Off I Impolitley Strike Fleets
And Counter Operatives With Objectives Nouns And Nice Sheets
Sorry For The Wackness If You Applaud Quit Feeding Me
Deviantly Exceede The Meet To Be The Best Emcee To Breath!


Settled Upon The Podeum The Pendulum Swingun! Hittin'
Gun Slingin' I'm Showin' Um, I'm Not One To Be Kiddin'!
Aka Raiza Sharp, R.A.I
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Post by Flux »

Yeah I Have Writer's Block Tho And Have Three Battles Lol Kinda Forced Thanx Tho I Got You...
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nah i think it flowed nicely
nothin seemed to obviously forced if u do have writers block
the dope multies helped it along
great stuff
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Post by Stratosphere »

The lyrics are dope - you got skills but the cadence in these verses is off and hard to catch ... it's an acapella freestyle . grade:B
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Post by Arvincible »

U shudnt be askin to battle if ur on writer's block, I don't excuses when u lose lol

Anyways, it doesn't look like a common rap, more on stage (thursday night poetry in the pub) - type of piece. Some catchy rhymes here and there..I can see u using big words and actually anyword that pops in ur head that sounds similar to the last word u said...there not a lot of relevance to anything but it sounds smart. Like saying sodium then salty, then something else lol.

Anyways keep it up man
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