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Posted: Fri Dec 05, 2008 10:37 am
by Lawgix
reason i posted the track is cause i wanted to get some feedback on flow, mic presence, see if people liked the song... i didn't post it cause i wanted to let u know who i was beefin with it was a newer song that i did... just never posted it up here...
Posted: Fri Dec 05, 2008 10:38 am
by complexity
Lawgix wrote:reason i posted the track is cause i wanted to get some feedback on flow, mic presence, see if people liked the song... i didn't post it cause i wanted to let u know who i was beefin with it was a newer song that i did... just never posted it up here...
I didn't know we were beefing anymore. It was a serious question that I wanted addressed before I left feedback that was mostly going to be positive.
Posted: Fri Dec 05, 2008 10:55 am
by Lawgix
nah i did have beef on a different site... i didn't want to take it here to say "hey look who i had beef with listen to how i trashed em" i wanted to bring it here to show the improvements that i've made... so u can leave feed if u want dude... and in advance thanx
Posted: Fri Dec 05, 2008 11:12 am
by Lawgix
and as far as u n me go we ain't beefin nemore dude... i know i don't have ne problems with u
Posted: Sat Dec 06, 2008 2:18 am
by Glamtrash
I like the storyline, I like the flow, and that's one of the few hooks I've heard that hasn't made me want to turn it off (see previous chamber posts I've left feed on - I hate things that are repetitive). You need to work on your breathing though, the fact that I can hear when you inhale bothers me. But this is definitely the best I've heard from you. Good job. 8.5/10.
Posted: Sat Dec 06, 2008 8:57 am
by complexity
Double.FL wrote:I like the storyline, I like the flow, and that's one of the few hooks I've heard that hasn't made me want to turn it off (see previous chamber posts I've left feed on - I hate things that are repetitive). You need to work on your breathing though, the fact that I can hear when you inhale bothers me. But this is definitely the best I've heard from you. Good job. 8.5/10.
Memorizing the verse has a lot to do with that too. You could probably get a more recommendations from people like Kurse.
As for the flow, I thought it was pretty good, it could be better.
The lyrics got good once in a while, but were also sub par at a lot of spots. Especially, when the rhyming became simpler.
Who you were dissing still doesn't make any sense to me.
The improvement is obviously significant, you sounded a lot more confident than back when you did that summer song.
I guess that's what comes to my head.
Posted: Sat Dec 06, 2008 12:35 pm
by Lawgix
well thank you for the feed back i appreciate it... the people i'm dissing is from a different site... i was an Internet DJ for this radio station and we had some beef and it just kept escalating so i put a stop to it with Trapped... i'm workin on alot of things... soon to get a pro mic and start really uppin my game with in the audio world... but it'll take some time for me to get the mic... but i'ma get it...
thanx guys