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My bad plex...a couple people were taking too long....there were a lot of people droppin as well.. i did not want shit to go overlooked.. And tight verse by the way.! Ups

fo real!!i agree! tight as fuck

FlipSide wrote:An active member collab on Illest,

Topic: World views on the effects of negativity on socitey, its causes, effects and so forth. Without further due.....

Lawgix

poverty is honestly gettin a lil bit critical
cuz obviously the governments prophecys

are a bit cinical were in a pivitol stand point
where hungry helpless victims murder their own people

for cash plus we let these crazy ass killers loose
so they can rape our children who in the palm of

their hands hold the future... but you keep askin
who can change all of this shit well its you sir...

[Best part was the inner multis at the beginning of the verse and the fluidity]

[Worst part was the dryness of some of the bars]

[6/10]

Flip

I walk like jesus with sandals ta face political scandals and hands hand u
frequent on channels the death of these mammals rasin no answers
A nation built with the hammers is in shambles cuz of what made em
No move to replace em..dreams chase em but negate when race comes
so i raise slums with raised guns and Bums with the drugs that made em
To replace chumps that hate us but plate us ta crate us in dollar makers
Our prison system got children missing what in life should be a given
a product of heaven trapped in a demon for the purpose of living

[Best part was the amount of topics that you raised without it seeming forced]

[There really wasn't a worst part, a consistent verse]

[9.3/10]

Messiah

I'm Infested With A Revival That They Protested For Their Survival
So Contested Became The Rivals We Left'em There To Die Fool
Such An Abhorrid Nature That We Had Conveyed To These People
To Save Them An Evil But Nothin We Hadn't Even Graced Them As Equals
Why The Hell Are We Better Than Any Third World Country
We Don't See Why We Should Help Because We're Not Hungry
But We Gave Them Rights It's Not There Fault There Murderers
Ignorant Shits Will You Use That Excuse The 5th Time They Murder Us

[Best part was the first two bars]

[Worst part was the last two bars]

[7.5/10]

Complexity

I never held back my views, with that in mind, crazy me/
believing the government has at least one decent agency/
taught that was the way to be, I just relaxed with delight/
didn't know the passion of christ, actually happened in life/
we went to iraq in a fight, over the Saudis, hijacking a flight/
ya'll see an unlawful policy, while we are all job free in poverty/
the mob and gotti robed less than them frauds on wallstreet/
we hit al-Masri with a drone strike, but can hardly drop a home price/

Feniex

the tempers hit as all undiscovered splenders hit
the weather hit's damn and undercover agents spit
to the ground where lessers live but they never quit
the sight's a bitter twist on the eyes of censorship
each member get's a discount only cuz they never lived
went to war now they on the cornerstore in rememberance
it's a feather's whisk from territorial trips on December's blend
all on a count of trends from then corrupted, 1970's president

[Best part was rhyming, in general]

[Worst part was the fact that you weren't saying as much because of the rhyming was getting in the way]

[7/10]

Catch 22

Corporation conglomerates monopolizing the revenue
I rep for victims of greed who see the lies and Catch 22's
I'm tellin you- ya sheltered by celebrity faces
Ya never see the homeless people lookin mentally vacant
Weathered and aged, but all you say is "it's irrelevant, ain't it?
Tell him to go get a job he's better endeavorin wages
A vicious cycle, quit the bible practice- this is a war
We gotta minimize the gap between the rich and the poor

[Best part was the opener, that made the rest of the verse even better]

[Not really a worst part, though I didn't like the mentally vacant line]

[8.5/10]

Deafshady

trust me, this will be last you hear of me
lyrically, blessed with it like im spirtually
indearing, crash at night with no steering
no fearing, crying in shame with no tearing
i must be nearing, my final destination
conversations, laughs, its all im facing
heart is racing, mind wont stop pacing
lifes in my palms, grippin tight for the taking

[Best part was the emotion]

[Worst part, it really wasn't on topic]

[6.5/10]

Overall. Solid collab with catch 22 and flipside really shining. These two guys make no sense to me anywhere else they post on the site besides the scriptures.

Wow thanks plex...it means a lot to compliment and shit on me at the same time lulz....its cool.... thanks a lot for the break down and adding ur verse... i think im commited to writing more consistently and feel some elevation due to this site... no matter how nonsensical i might seem i read and reply to most drops on writtens and open mic....and elevate everytime i do a piece..watch it im going for the most improved mc...

Lawgix

poverty is honestly gettin a lil bit critical
cuz obviously the governments prophecys

are a bit cinical were in a pivitol stand point
where hungry helpless victims murder their own people

for cash plus we let these crazy ass killers loose
so they can rape our children who in the palm of

their hands hold the future... but you keep askin
who can change all of this shit well its you sir...




... You Sir... Executed Nice. Good Pick For a Intro Def.


Flip

I walk like jesus with sandals ta face political scandals and hands hand u
frequent on channels the death of these mammals rasin no answers
A nation built with the hammers is in shambles cuz of what made em
No move to replace em..dreams chase em but negate when race comes
so i raise slums with raised guns and Bums with the drugs that made em

Snapped. Def a Quick Elevation

To replace chumps that hate us but plate us ta crate us in dollar makers
Our prison system got children missing what in life should be a given
a product of heaven trapped in a demon for the purpose of living

Last bar is crazy. Good Shit


Messiah

I'm Infested With A Revival That They Protested For Their Survival
So Contested Became The Rivals We Left'em There To Die Fool
Such An Abhorrid Nature That We Had Conveyed To These People
To Save Them An Evil But Nothin We Hadn't Even Graced Them As Equals
Why The Hell Are We Better Than Any Third World Country
We Don't See Why We Should Help Because We're Not Hungry
But We Gave Them Rights It's Not There Fault There Murderers
Ignorant Shits Will You Use That Excuse The 5th Time They Murder Us

Liked Your Approach Homie. Def a High Point Verse 4 U.

Complexity

I never held back my views, with that in mind, crazy me/
believing the government has at least one decent agency/
taught that was the way to be, I just relaxed with delight/
didn't know the passion of christ, actually happened in life/
we went to iraq in a fight, over the Saudis, hijacking a flight/
ya'll see an unlawful policy, while we are all job free in poverty/
the mob and gotti robed less than them frauds on wallstreet/
God and greed, its a volley between the evils of profit and prophecy/

Lmfao .. Spazzed. I Bet You Didn't Spend to Much Time on this but you Slayed it. Feeling the wallstreet finisher

Feniex

the tempers hit as all undiscovered splenders hit
the weather hit's damn and undercover agents spit
to the ground where lessers live but they never quit
the sight's a bitter twist on the eyes of censorship
each member get's a discount only cuz they never lived
went to war now they on the cornerstore in rememberance
it's a feather's whisk from territorial trips on December's blend
all on a count of trends from then corrupted, 1970's president

Stitched Together Way better Then Verses iv'e Seen from You.

War Line <<

Catch 22

Corporation conglomerates monopolizing the revenue
I rep for victims of greed who see the lies and Catch 22's
I'm tellin you- ya sheltered by celebrity faces
Ya never see the homeless people lookin mentally vacant
Weathered and aged, but all you say is "it's irrelevant, ain't it?
Tell him to go get a job he's better endeavorin wages
A vicious cycle, quit the bible practice- this is a war
We gotta minimize the gap between the rich and the poor

Wrote Well Through.. Seeing Improvement. Good last line.


Deafshady

trust me, this will be last you hear of me
lyrically, blessed with it like im spirtually
indearing, crash at night with no steering
no fearing, crying in shame with no tearing
i must be nearing, my final destination
conversations, laughs, its all im facing
heart is racing, mind wont stop pacing
lifes in my palms, grippin tight for the taking


Good Flow, Should of extended it And got More in Deeper
None The Less, Cool verse.



As a Collab This Shit Was Fire...


Flip Messiah Feniex Lawgix And Catch22 all came way harder then I Thought they Could.


Good Shit. Collab Of Mid Year

Lawgix

poverty is honestly gettin a lil bit critical
cuz obviously the governments prophecys are a bit cinical
were in a pivitol stand point
where hungry helpless victims murder their own people
for cash plus we let these crazy ass killers loose
so they can rape our children who in the palm of
their hands hold the future... but you keep askin
who can change all of this shit well its you sir...

Ight For Advise...After Cinical It Doesn't Rhyme For A While...Maybe It's Not Your Style Or Maybe I'm Reading It Wrong...but Cash And Hands Were Seperated To Far Apart And I'm Not Sure If Stand Was Apart Of The Cadence...The Message Was There Tho And It Stuck To Topic

Flip

I walk like jesus with sandals ta face political scandals and hands hand u
frequent on channels the death of these mammals rasin no answers
A nation built with the hammers is in shambles cuz of what made em
No move to replace em..dreams chase em but negate when race comes
so i raise slums with raised guns and Bums with the drugs that made em
To replace chumps that hate us but plate us ta crate us in dollar makers
Our prison system got children missing what in life should be a given
a product of heaven trapped in a demon for the purpose of living

Crazy Flow...Stayed On Topic, And Like Lawgix You Stayed On Topic The Flow Was Nice And Structure Was Very Well Articulated Nice Drop

Messiah

I'm Infested With A Revival That They Protested For Their Survival
So Contested Became The Rivals We Left'em There To Die Fool
Such An Abhorrid Nature That We Had Conveyed To These People
To Save Them An Evil But Nothin We Hadn't Even Graced Them As Equals
Why The Hell Are We Better Than Any Third World Country
We Don't See Why We Should Help Because We're Not Hungry
But We Gave Them Rights It's Not There Fault There Murderers
Ignorant Shits Will You Use That Excuse The 5th Time They Murder Us

This Rhymed And Stayed On Topic So All Three Are Commemmorated For Such A Task...This Had The Same Look As Flip's Verse...Just The Multies Not Saying You Were Biting Or Anyone Copied Anyone Just Another Nice Drop

Complexity

I never held back my views, with that in mind, crazy me/
believing the government has at least one decent agency/
taught that was the way to be, I just relaxed with delight/
didn't know the passion of christ, actually happened in life/
we went to iraq in a fight, over the Saudis, hijacking a flight/
ya'll see an unlawful policy, while we are all job free in poverty/
the mob and gotti robed less than them frauds on wallstreet/
God and greed, its a volley between the evils of profit and prophecy/

I Like This One Specifically Cuz God, Terrorism, Hunger, Corruption, And Hatred Were All Described...Nice Job Here Complexity

Feniex

the tempers hit as all undiscovered splenders hit
the weather hit's damn and undercover agents spit
to the ground where lessers live but they never quit
the sight's a bitter twist on the eyes of censorship
each member get's a discount only cuz they never lived
went to war now they on the cornerstore in rememberance
it's a feather's whisk from territorial trips on December's blend
all on a count of trends from then corrupted, 1970's president

Seems Like He Hit This One Harder Then Most But I Can't Shake The Feeling That He Felt Like He Forced This Out Still A Good Verse

Catch 22

Corporation conglomerates monopolizing the revenue
I rep for victims of greed who see the lies and Catch 22's
I'm tellin you- ya sheltered by celebrity faces
Ya never see the homeless people lookin mentally vacant
Weathered and aged, but all you say is "it's irrelevant, ain't it?
Tell him to go get a job he's better endeavorin wages
A vicious cycle, quit the bible practice- this is a war
We gotta minimize the gap between the rich and the poor

Hit The Politics Of This War And Economy...Simplisticly Tho

Deafshady

trust me, this will be last you hear of me
lyrically, blessed with it like im spirtually
indearing, crash at night with no steering
no fearing, crying in shame with no tearing
i must be nearing, my final destination
conversations, laughs, its all im facing
heart is racing, mind wont stop pacing
lifes in my palms, grippin tight for the taking

Seemed Like He Threw God Into This One...But This Just Rhymed To Me...Not Alot Of Stuff Different From Everyone Else A Good Verse Solid Collabo Fellas Ya'll Stayed On Topic Which Is Good And You Said Somethin'...Peace