Multi Mutual (Keystyle)

- Mutual - · Post by **- Mutual -** » Mon Dec 08, 2008 7:35 am

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/false ... 11281.html

jus sumin quick i'm tryna come back any feed is appreciated and will be returned if you leave a link or sum shit

i'm back-to-rap attack-the-slack hangin from me when i first sat-relaxed
a sack-of-facts got me trackin-gats now i'm a see i i can reach the max
a pack-of-mac lackin-mags got be jailed fo packin heat in my bag
so catch-the-stacks no match-for-plaques the truth taken like it's tax
so hatch-a-trap that patches-slaps cheer me up i'm way too sad
sad-of-spac rappers tryna rap-an-act jus shut up n sitback
i'll leave u clinically-broken-n-lyrically-hopin that u leave still copin
cus my memorys'-golden-the-felonies-stolen leave u dyin n cold then
shit it's spiritually-olden-hearin-me-spoken got arrested for holdin
haters-just-tokin marijuana creations-when-smokin detested n broken
am i elevated-or-rennovated guessed debated-or-calculated
inflated-n-desocrated demonstrated-or-appreciated deflated-an-jus-to-hated
cus u know u all full of the hate now u know that i made this

yeah like i said sumin quick i hope ya'll leave feed much appreciated

Ambiguous Realm · Post by **Ambiguous Realm** » Mon Dec 08, 2008 7:50 am

nice, i saw some good multis, saw from ur feedback that its ur favorite area, mine as well haha, there's about a good handful of people on here who can deliver multis like this, we should have a multi battle sometime lol should be fun, overall it was nice, couple parts that fell off at the endings where i thought the multis should've been but overall i'd give this a 7/10 strictly on multis

- Mutual - · Post by **- Mutual -** » Mon Dec 08, 2008 7:54 am

thanks fo the feed Koms n yeah it would be good havin a multi battle type shit could have sum great rhymes right there

Jesodist · Post by **Jesodist** » Mon Dec 08, 2008 2:04 pm

i'm back-to-rap attack-the-slack hangin from me when i first sat-relaxed
a sack-of-facts got me trackin-gats now i'm a see i i can reach the max
a pack-of-mac lackin-mags got be jailed fo packin heat in my bag
so catch-the-stacks no match-for-plaques the truth taken like it's tax
so hatch-a-trap that patches-slaps cheer me up i'm way too sad
sad-of-spac rappers tryna rap-an-act jus shut up n sitback

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This seemed very basic to me nothing i havent heard just re worded different.
You had a Nice flow to it and some preey nice multies. Which i think you could of fixed up better.

i'll leave u clinically-broken-n-lyrically-hopin that u leave still copin
cus my memorys'-golden-the-felonies-stolen leave u dyin n cold then
shit it's spiritually-olden-hearin-me-spoken got arrested for holdin
haters-just-tokin marijuana creations-when-smokin detested n broken
am i elevated-or-rennovated guessed debated-or-calculated
inflated-n-desocrated demonstrated-or-appreciated deflated-an-jus-to-hated
cus u know u all full of the hate now u know that i made this

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Your flow was a bit choppy on this one all over the place. Keep practicing the multies are the best i rarely focus on punchlines.

- Mutual - · Post by **- Mutual -** » Tue Dec 09, 2008 3:17 am

thanks fo the feed dude i'll return the favour at sum point

Glamtrash · Post by **Glamtrash** » Tue Dec 09, 2008 5:54 am

You're getting better. Keep droppin.

TreTru · Post by **TreTru** » Wed Dec 10, 2008 5:50 pm

yeah it's allright..you guys do alot of multi's wich is
what I been lacking so one on that..

but I had a hard time staying with the subject..IMO

It's rappable to a beat. you stayed in the pocket most of the time and I dig that..

your obviously buildin lyrical muscle so it wont take long...

- Mutual - · Post by **- Mutual -** » Thu Dec 11, 2008 1:48 am

thanks fo the feed Tre

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