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Battle Verse ( Purlee Deff)

Post by Haz »

.. Yeah ..


Bitches Know You Don't Stack Figgaz-Mayne!Dats Y U Can't 'Pull Back' Lyk a Trigga-Strain!..
Dis NIGGAS-LAME,He From Da Bay But Mistah Fab Got a BIGGA-NAME!?!...

(Pull Back- Get Booty)...

Tell Purlee Grow Up Faggit!,i Throw Up Acid..This Bastard-Spits-Flem...
When Hazards-Fist-Sen Killa Punches your 'Dead Lee' Like "Hazardiss-Chems!"

Sharp Ridges 2 The Faggits-Jaw Have The Maggit-Sawed..
This 'Material'll Hang um Up' Like Boobs With 'Padded Braws!!'...

BITCH "Ben Ya Name" Like Af-Lack,U Neva Pass-Crack Ya Ass-Wack!..
Ya Audio STATS LACK! Wen It Comes 2 Da Mic 'Put It Down' Like ya LAS-TRACK!...

When U STEP-YA-MOMMAZ-GITTIN! Hit Up, Split Up..TECZ-A-BOMB-YA-LISTIN!!...
Get Executed ACCEPT-SADDAMZ-PASISHIN,Dis a Hearin Contest Hows DEFF-Da-COMPATISHIN?!

Once I REANGLE-TECS He'll Get Sent To a ANGELS-STEPS WITH A STRANGLED-NECK N
TANGLED BREAST,'KILL'T' cause he 'Spit-in-Ass' Like Cummin Durin ANEL-SEX!...

My Goal? Its To Have G-SWEP..Till Only His Baby Gap Tees-Lef!!...WHY
Would HE-STEP? Now Like a Replayed Bruce Documentary Ima 'RUN OVA LEE-DEFF'..

He Got No Flow Thats What a DROUGHT ABOUT,'Rode My Name' REROUTE-YA-MOUTH..
Now I'ma Grab a COffin N 'Put DEF-IN-IT' Like Anotha Word 4 WITHOUT-A-DOUBT!!..
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Post by ScottJames »

no hate but i wasnt feelin this...
too soft of punches and felt the nameplay coulda been more original

thoa

He Got No Flow Thats What a DROUGHT ABOUT,'Rode My Name' REROUTE-YA-MOUTH..
Now I'ma Grab a COffin N 'Put DEF-IN-IT' Like Anotha Word 4 WITHOUT-A-DOUBT!!..

was hot!!
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No Hate Taken ..
Thanks for The Feed
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Post by Panda »

complete garabge!!!!!!!

haha syke, few good punches i think..all the bars were solid

dis line was cool

Tell Purlee Grow Up Faggit!,i Throw Up Acid..This Bastard-Spits-Flem...
When Hazards-Fist-Sen Killa Punches your 'Dead Lee' Like "Hazardiss-Chems!"
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Re: Battle Verse ( Purlee Deff)

Post by Cee4 »

cant be fucked breaking this down for you but since im a man of my word i will. obviously the fact that you put it in the scriptures means you thought it was good verse.
-.HaZarD.- wrote:.. Yeah ..


Bitches Know You Don't Stack Figgaz-Mayne!Dats Y U Can't 'Pull Back' Lyk a Trigga-Strain!..
Dis NIGGAS-LAME,He From Da Bay But Mistah Fab Got a BIGGA-NAME!?!...
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first lines straight. i thought this guy was from florida so i dont get the punch. could be wrong tho so i wouldnt like to criticise


Tell Purlee Grow Up Faggit!,i Throw Up Acid..This Bastard-Spits-Flem...
When Hazards-Fist-Sen Killa Punches your 'Dead Lee' Like "Hazardiss-Chems!"
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"tell purlee to grow up faggot"? are you calling the reader a faggot or purlee? its not worded properly. the rest of the first line is straight. filler but decent. the second bar is just no. dead lee...nah aint happening

Sharp Ridges 2 The Faggits-Jaw Have The Maggit-Sawed..
This 'Material'll Hang um Up' Like Boobs With 'Padded Braws!!'...
^^^^
its alrite. a bit generic but its straight

BITCH "Ben Ya Name" Like Af-Lack,U Neva Pass-Crack Ya Ass-Wack!..
Ya Audio STATS LACK! Wen It Comes 2 Da Mic 'Put It Down' Like ya LAS-TRACK!...
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first line is terrible lol. ben aflek shit is forced beyond belief. nice personal wit the put it down shit tho. that gets you point.

When U STEP-YA-MOMMAZ-GITTIN! Hit Up, Split Up..TECZ-A-BOMB-YA-LISTIN!!...
Get Executed ACCEPT-SADDAMZ-PASISHIN,Dis a Hearin Contest Hows DEFF-Da-COMPATISHIN?!
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first line is all filler. all verses have some filler so not a big deal but it dosent really make sense to me. the punchline was dope. the best of the verse. word of advice use a spellchecker coz it through me off a bit especially whatever the word after saddam is supposed to be.

Once I REANGLE-TECS He'll Get Sent To a ANGELS-STEPS WITH A STRANGLED-NECK N
TANGLED BREAST,'KILL'T' cause he 'Spit-in-Ass' Like Cummin Durin ANEL-SEX!...
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your gonna "tangle is breast" wow. forced and just stupid. spit in ass like anal sex dosent make sense either. what you saying he spat in your ass and now your gonna kill him? spit is ass maybe but not the way you worded it. concepts played out anyway

My Goal? Its To Have G-SWEP..Till Only His Baby Gap Tees-Lef!!...WHY
Would HE-STEP? Now Like a Replayed Bruce Documentary Ima 'RUN OVA LEE-DEFF'..
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dosent make much sense. bruce lee i get it but the whole thing just dosent work for me. the first line is laughable...in a bad way


He Got No Flow Thats What a DROUGHT ABOUT,'Rode My Name' REROUTE-YA-MOUTH..
Now I'ma Grab a COffin N 'Put DEF-IN-IT' Like Anotha Word 4 WITHOUT-A-DOUBT!!..
^^^^
nice bar here. the def in it was like your only bit of decent wordplay in the whole verse. punch could of been worded better but it was straight


there you go. i think you need to take time to word your verses better coz some of the shit dosent make sense. 90% of this verse ws filler. i know its hard coz you dont know the guy so its hard to get personals and shit so i take that into account. thats an honest opinion on your verse. obviously im gonna bring up every bad point in your verse coz your a dickhead but i dont think you could argue with my break down.
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Post by Haz »

Lmaooooo
Actually i just Posted it to get Feed Since he No Showed...
and Position Pasishin..
your Sucha Angry Kid..

'Spittin Ass' Like cumin Durin Anal Sex
Spit-in-Ass... spittin ass...Doesnt Make Sense Stil? lmaooo

anyways i'm not gunna Even c omment bout The Whole Breakdown
like i Said Last night your a Bitter Dood
Thanks 4 Da Feed!.. Don't Flood My Script With Bullshit Eitha. u Can Say somethin in Fight club..


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Post by Cee4 »

i mean i gave you an honest opinion and that makes me an "angry dood" lol.
how come when you break down my verse in the same manner its "constructive criticism" and when i do the same im a hater or whatever. i mean eveyone else who`s commented on your verse basically said it was wack. like i said if you can find anything wrong in what i said then point it out but you cant for the simple reason i speak the truth. i gave an opinion u dont like it coz its me that said it so you get all emotional. kinda like your battle with ekoms lol. i voted fairly and then you cry like baby and then what do you know a bunch of people come in and saw the battle the same way i did.

you just need to chill man. i know u told me the real reason your against me is coz u think im too cocky or whatever. u notice i only do it to wind you up? and you take the bait everytime lol all i need to do is hit out with a little comment such as the one i made about you and millz battle on that other site and its on lol. im too smart. i control you.


anyway enough typing lol
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

hm, didn't see nothin bitter bout wat he said

n e ways, a lot of it seemed forced, and that spittin ass line.. unless ur referring to cumming as spitting or semen as spit.. i don't really get that, think a lot of it could've been said differently or worded better n e ways, wasn't a bad drop...nothing really stood out except ur last bar which was pretty nice, the nameplay was used nicely and the pun was alright
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Post by Jesodist »

some the lines were a bit choppy, no hard punches no word play unless its a free you dropped its ok but its not good material for battling.
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