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The Comeback - Hip Hop's Dead pt 1

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this is my comeback rhyme pls leave feed so i know how i'mm gettin on

yeah
Man i'm back
shit hopefully
i'm elevated

now it seems like i've gotten better ignorin what the haters say
leave'em to fade away leave em all in shades of grey until they debt is paid
until i'm set rest n laid i'll be followin rap until the best regret afraid
to say a lazy way of rappin is dr suess rhymin see the way i popped a new rhyme in
if a skyscraper collapses on me just stare everybody knows i'll come climbin
back to the top i'm not there yet don't think i've forgot
awkward places fallen graces well "dis" if u look at their faces
like the bad wordplay wasnt enough they think hip hop better with braces
so called grills get em out of ya face and let me jus say this
they only got em cus them braces holdin the game straight
a full hotel it's cold n u came late hip hop is dead
gods n devils i told em the same fate it's gettin old with all the hate
look at the state of hip hop Eminem disses Game
50 cent new album gainst Kanye while all hate Lil Wayne
Flo Rida shud be gettin dissed look at all shame
"low" down the list of fame man take him out of the frame
spittin that written gettin torn up i'll leave u out in da rain
this aint about the money we doin fo the love of it
MONEY nothin but rappers like soulja boy doin rap becus of it
fake hustlers they talkin bout poppin niggas they aint even done none of it
tryna make out they got the guns n shit i aint doin fo the fun of it
man i love rap but why the fuck does it have to be populated
with fuckas that can barely spit thinkin they was a GOD created
well enough with the fakes talkin bout hey all got wot it takes
jus do shit if u love it why can't we? T.i said "we mighty full are selves aren't we"
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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bumpin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

it was alright, i see improvement made and still improvement to be made, ur better then before but still have a way to go, few decent multis..few bad ones,intro was the best part of it imo.
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thanks fo the Feed Koms

Bumpin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Bumpin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Post by precise »

well its not awful

u do have potential, cause ive seen u drop some nicer bars in the cypher section

n i gotta agree with ekoms, uve elevated a bit, just keep workin at it n ull elevate some more dude
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